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Illusions Eye
Contributed by
forever_lonely
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Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 06:42:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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As teardrops drift from starry skies
When moonlight dance within disguise
Dreams begin, in silent form
Awash of thoughts, a thinking storm
This storm shall rage, with whispered winds
A gentle breeze, to caress you sins
Your mind aloft, in clouds complex
Your heart to drown as thoughts perplex
Now a switch, to violent heat
Incubus stands, before your feet
A sensuous touch, of illusions might
From male to female, human delight
As quick as it started, your heat into cold
Your body reacts, the memories unfold
A nightmare of death, a coffin of lies
As dark as your thoughts, from deafening cries
Sweating with fear, you awake from your sleep
A child of twelve, you cry and you weep
You call out to the skies, pray to the storm
As you fly out the window and take a new form
From starry skies, when teardrops drift
Your mind bestows a thoughtful gift
It makes you laugh, it hears you cry
Realties thought, in illusions eye
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forever_lonely
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Re: Illusions Eye
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 07:04:36 PM AEST
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wow and wow! luke, this is vividly intriging, i feel like i went on a journey and never left the mountain! lol, i just love your images and the whole poem is fantastic:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Illusions Eye
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by Archie on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 08:17:13 PM AEST
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| Very good poem. well written |
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Re: Illusions Eye
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 02:41:34 AM AEST
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Another top class write. Vivid and enchanting.
Well done. |
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Re: Illusions Eye
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 06:56:29 AM AEST
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Damn, I am way beyond impressed! I absolutely love the contrasting feel of this, with alternating visions of both felicity and nightmare. Toss in your always sterling technical prowess, and...you've fabricated a masterfully executed work or art.
Truly,
-V.S.
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Re: Illusions Eye
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 05:49:39 AM AEST
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| An impressive write ... with underlying sad images ... very intriguing poem ... Jan |
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Re: Illusions Eye
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by loveisendless on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 11:45:53 PM AEST
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SOUNDS LIKE A HIT TO ME! THE UNKNOWN
IS ALMIGHTY BY ITSELF ALONE!! THE DARK STARTS WHERE THE LIGHT ONCE LEFT ITS MARK!!! GREAT ONE LUKE-AWESOME!!!!
DAN!!!! |
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