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Sinking Opinions.
Contributed by
SilentPwn
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Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 07:59:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I tightly buckle my feelings within.
I seem to be sinking under again.
Expressing myself through poetry,
helps me to barely live.
It causes me to come from this acoma
and restore most concisousness.
Inflicting pain apon myself..
helps me to deal with emotion.
It inspires me to write about life,
because that is my devotion.
Right here, in my cell..
A place I never call home
I lay, thinking, of what comes
As I sit alone.
There is a knife I see..
Glistening with it's silver coat.
Waiting there, not judging me..
When It's that I need to cope.
My long sleeves cover scars
that I know people will see.
I cover then because I'm embarresed
of what the naked eye perceives.
It tells their brain, "She's an outcast."
and I get secluded even more.
Maybe I should stop right now
and let my scars heal over.
"You caused this pain," is what I'm told.
but just go away and die.
I don't care what you think of me.
I see it different through my eyes.
I see I'm helping myself through pain.
I think I'm helping to mend your ways.
You see scars and think, "She's stupid for doing this."
but never care to understand, you say, "My life's as good as it gets."
Well, everyone isn't fine and well.
People actually have problems they don't know how to deal..
With, people do commit suicide because they let things some say get in.
I hear what you talk about when I'm not there.
I've lied to you many times, saying that I'm cured.
Well, here I go.. into the unknown
To try and explain my reasons for pain.
I could just lie again.
..ignore my instinct within.
Forget my heartache.
Just leave me be, I'm born to be alone.
I don't care what you see.
'Cause one day, soon..
I'll be put out of my misery.
Copyright ©
SilentPwn
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2004-05-07 19:59:22]
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by AnGeL_M on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 08:17:28 PM AEST
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This Is Sad But Written Well !!!!!!!!!! And Your Right People Actually Have Problems They Don't Know How To Deal With ......
People Do Commit Suicide Because They Let Things Some Say Get In. And That Is An Aweful Way To Deal With There Problems !!!!!!!!!!!!! Suicide Isn't Always The Answer !!!!!!!!!!! Sure It Might Be A Way Out For Them But It's Only Started For Those Who Cared And loved Them So !!!!!!!!!
********LoVe**AnGeL*********
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 08:25:29 PM AEST
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suicide would be the waste of a great talent, this poem touched me to the core, and if you have an ability to do that to people the world would be a very sad place without you.
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 08:37:10 PM AEST
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What a classic opening line
"I tightly buckle my feelings within".One of those you wish you had written yourself....well you did !!.A very strong and deep piece, well put.
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 08:40:54 PM AEST
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| Are you suicidal? Or are you trying to portray suicidal people without feeling that way yourself? Your "poetry" reads roughly for me, but perhaps not for others......you lack strong symbolism and the indirectness (cleverness) that is traditionally poetic. |
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by SilentPwn on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 08:41:10 PM AEST
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| Well, eh. Thank you. |
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 08:56:46 PM AEST
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Written with so much emotions.... I hope this is fictional....
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by Randibee85 on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 09:36:31 PM AEST
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| WOW! I'm very impressed. Good job expressing your feelings. |
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by JennyFruFru on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 11:18:06 PM AEST
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| although long sleeves may physically hide the scars... it is still evident to many... scars are not erasable... i feel your pain... stay strong........ |
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Re: Sinking Opinions.
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by shelby on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 10:05:46 AM AEST
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I hope these feeling of suicide arent for real because nomatter how bad things get there still is a life awiting you. Nice expression in this write.
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