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8 a.m. Kitchen
Contributed by
reilt
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Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 05:36:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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You were sitting across the table
Sipping coffee.
Your eyes mirroring
Something of a reluctance.
And I sighed in the silence
Of an 8 o' clock kitchen
- a.m -
The scent of burnt toast
Clinging to Monday's air,
Lingering with the tension.
Interrupted, briefly,
By the whistling of a kettle
And I am awoken.
Pottering about mid pseudo-purpose.
Until you emptied the remains of your mug
And I knew.
No kiss, No embrace.
You turned and left.
Alone,
I sat in a timeless kitchen
Where the day and toast and kettle
And God damn everything else
Ceased to exist
Except for that unfinished coffee
Pouring down the drain.
Copyright ©
reilt
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2004-05-05 17:36:18]
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Re: 8 a.m. Kitchen
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 06:03:41 PM AEST
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| This is really good! Keep on writing! |
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Re: 8 a.m. Kitchen
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 06:05:58 PM AEST
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| Wow... this is awesome, sad but very well written... keep it up! |
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Re: 8 a.m. Kitchen
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by New_York_Chick on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 06:10:26 PM AEST
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heartbreaking
but beautiful |
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Re: 8 a.m. Kitchen
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 10:06:54 PM AEST
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This is very sad, but you wrote it with great imagery..
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Re: 8 a.m. Kitchen
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by bernard on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 04:14:55 AM AEST
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Great write especially the last line pouring the coffee rest down the sink. It captured my imagination and I re-read the poem. It seemed such a final act .
Top Marks.
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Re: 8 a.m. Kitchen
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by Juliet on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 01:51:38 PM AEST
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| Wow. Really good. Sometimes it is great to stumble upon old treasures written years ago. |
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