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Uneducated
Contributed by
remy
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Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 01:42:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
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wait...
let passion's plain topple down...
wait...
look around in this simple town...
seldom stately but blissful, cold calmings claim classes
quaint quarantine lies greatful, still impervious of statutes
superstitious in nature, left under man handled
gone missing the research, that stakes a hold in sandles
enumerated possibilities
lacking sense but staying nonetheless
as gatherings go and come peacefully
the moors conjure another victim possessed
no...
the feat feels failed
and superimposed this time and again...
the feat feels failed...
oh well forget it...
straddling surefelt conviction, right on leftover posings
disregard all restrictions, as if i needed those things
while malicious the venture, closed season has left now
the purpose lies so sure, even when you don't know how
infinite yet surmountable
when the calling forces more ever still
the chain links fasten in their hold
while sharpshooters tighten the quill
no...
the feat feels failed
yes superimposed this time and again...
the feat feels failed
oh well...
breaking on a moment of calm
to get broken with no alarm
whilst the serpent venoms the voices
striking each down! striking each down!
suppositions force fumblings, each way so untactful
the footing comes crumbling, in backgrounds i'm baffled
so stringent in supply, so focused in seething
in pressure it's applied, the cherubs come teething
overzealous in name
no trifle grudges harbored locally
there's pause to question grip in these reigns
but where should my eyes set to see
no...
the feat feels failed
it's superimposed this time and again...
the feat feels failed
oh well don't pay mind...
staking bets on sugarsided songs
bitter comes the lack of alarm
and closer to hell but call it heaven...
succulent cells couldn't be the ending...
this wishing well looks so misleading...
whilst the serpent venoms the voices
striking each down! striking each down!
the student spends forever unearthing
striking each down! striking each down!
Copyright ©
remy
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2004-05-04 13:42:39]
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Re: Uneducated
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 01:53:00 PM AEST
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| Really well done! |
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Re: Uneducated
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by JennyFruFru on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 02:05:30 PM AEST
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| sounds like you feel a bit chaotic.... your choice of words is very well.... some of them i forgot existed :) :) :) |
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Re: Uneducated
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 02:33:34 PM AEST
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wow... very cryptic, very well written though...
uneducated? I think not... :)
Dani
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Re: Uneducated
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by reilt on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 04:24:38 PM AEST
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| fantastic...great write. i loved it |
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Re: Uneducated
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by arden on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 05:24:24 PM AEST
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wonderful use of words. this was an amazing write.
well done i really liked it.
Arden |
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Re: Uneducated
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by secretwind on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 01:57:06 AM AEST
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| This flow crescendos like a waterfall of emotional torture....excellent. |
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Re: Uneducated
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 03:01:56 PM AEST
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| This is most definately not an uneducated write. I'd like to pick your brain and see where you get your ideas from. Excellent post my dear friend Remy. Excellent. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Uneducated
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by JennyFruFru on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 12:42:20 AM AEST
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| you describe things so well ... :) :) :) |
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Re: Uneducated
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by eatfresh22 on
Friday, 1st October 2004 @ 05:00:05 PM AEST
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And it is a very good thing that you are not uneducated. Nicely done. The alliterations were absolutely amazing!!!
~Carrie~ |
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