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cliche
Contributed by
dolly_dagger
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Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 07:34:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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In trying to think outside the box
I have created a larger box outside the original
Fully frustrated, I can never quite reach
the rim to grab on to
And clamber clumsily yet purposefully out
To see with real eyes
To sample all my ideas with new taste buds
In the hope that something more enchanting
Ends up puked on the paper
Rather than cliche after cliche
Chunky, ugly and reeking of the acidity of a thousand other poets
All regurgitating for each other
Damn, I just can't stand it
I want to be more dynamic
I want to take you somewhere new
I want to mix your brain to goo
With words you've never met before
I know I'm capable of so much more
Than this foul smelling dribble
I know I'm on the edge of a revolution with you all...
Maybe I just need to stick my fingers a little further down my throat...
Copyright ©
dolly_dagger
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2004-05-02 19:34:25]
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Re: cliche
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by Broken-glass on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 04:14:06 AM AEST
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| Believe me, your poetry does go outside the 'box'. I get this feeling all the time, like everything I write has been said before etc. I think your puke is enchanting enough to mix my brain to goo! xxxx |
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Re: cliche
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 06:43:16 PM AEST
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muhuh. That last line was good. Very good. Not greater than the sum of its parts, however, Ms. Dagger.
A very fine work - introspective, yet extroverted.
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: cliche
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 08:15:02 PM AEST
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OMG the 1st two lines of this made me think, and its such a good point
whenever we try and think about something outside of our perception, we try and think about it orginally, but in the end we just apply the same boundries and limitations to it as everything else we think about
i dunno what my point is, but i love the fact u made me think =D |
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