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Didn't Realize
Contributed by
2ndChance
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Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 11:46:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
ApologyPoetry
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I didn't realize,
that you cared for me.
I didn't realize,
that you cry.
I didn't realize,
how un-happy you were.
I didn't realize,
that I needed you.
I didn't realize,
that you hurt yourself.
I didn't realize,
that I started this trend.
I didn't realize,
that I felt that way.
I didn't realize,
that its not just I that has problems.
I didn't realize,
that life goes on.
I didn't realize,
how hard I fell.
I didn't realize,
that you caught me.
I didn't realize,
that you wanted a song.
I didn't realize,
how much you gave.
I didn't realize,
that I was your reason for living.
I didn't realize,
and I'm so sorry.
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2ndChance
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2004-05-02 11:46:22]
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Re: Didn't Realize
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 12:28:20 PM AEST
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I think that this poem could have fit in the "self-struggle category"...not only does this poem seem an strong apology, but also shows an awakening of a self-realization within the author--the world doesn't revolve around the him/her. Excellent piece.
My only "negative" is a grammar issue with the line "that its not just I that has problems": the "I" should have been a "me" as a predicate to the "I didn't realize" line before it, or the I should have been in quotation marks to indicate that the "bad grammar" was intentional to keep the "I" references consistent.
A very small complaint for this wonderful poem...I liked this one a lot. |
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Re: Didn't Realize
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 12:53:41 PM AEST
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I don't know what the last reviewer was talking about... putting "me" in there would disrupt the whole flow of the poem.
Keep it as is... it's really well written. |
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Re: Didn't Realize
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by Live2Die on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 10:13:15 PM AEST
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| Wowzeers. Awesome poem...who'd you write it for? |
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