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When Stars Die
Contributed by
Black13
on
Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 09:41:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Every truth I learn's a lie;
Inside, sometimes, wish I'd die.
When all the world hold you down;
That's when you always play the clown.
In eternity's broken tears,
you're consumed by all your fears.
No indignant words will save;
When you're born to be a slave.
And nothing seems to bring relief,
death itself just brings more grief.
When love itself just strings you along
you'll never feel that you belong.
The stars won't seem to shine
when hope has left the line.
So you're giving up tonight,
'cause your life has lost it's light.
And nothing will be right again;
when you're torn apart by pain.
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Black13
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2004-05-01 21:41:34] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: When Stars Die
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 09:53:46 PM AEST (User
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Very good, strong, deep write!
Awesome work.
luv, huggs, forgiveness,
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Re: When Stars Die
(User Rating: 1 ) by arden on
Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 10:52:05 PM AEST (User
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wow... i sure did feel this poem.
your words are powerful.
i can relate.
well done.
i really liked this.
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Re: When Stars Die
(User Rating: 1 ) by thumper on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 12:56:05 AM AEST (User
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Very poignant! You have put to words my feelings exactly. It is very hard to let go of pain when you are a slave. Kudos Black.
Thumps ; 0 )
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Re: When Stars Die
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 11:17:35 AM AEST (User
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emotions running deep in this poem well done
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Re: When Stars Die
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 09:20:40 AM AEST (User
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I know this feeling. It is part of a transformation and of acceptance. You have described it well. If you will permit me one correction...there is no possessive for its. It's just its. It's is the contraction for it is.
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Re: When Stars Die
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 02:28:45 AM AEST (User
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Excellent! This piece says it true, and says it well. I've known this feeling. But hang in there. I think that starlight is more resilient than we know.
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