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not tast nor smell but power!LOVE
Contributed by
lexxie
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Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 07:09:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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the feeling consumes me
im addicted
its getting stronger
the feeling
it wont go away
even when i want it to
its as if i have to have it
im addicted,
im addicted to the sound of the rain
im safe from the rain
im addicted to the smell of it
even tho im not by it
im addicted to the moveing of it
even tho i can not see it
im addicited to the power of it
even tho i can no see it
im addicted to the sweetness of it
even tho i can not taste it
can you guess what im addicted to?
there yet?
now?
im not addicted to the taste fer it has no taste no site but only feeling like the power of your heart when its going faster and faster IM ADDICITED TO YOUR LOVE! the feeling it gives me im addicted to the power
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Re: not tast nor smell but power!LOVE
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by kidpoet_213 on
Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 07:57:15 PM AEST
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Lexxie...
A good poem all in all... but there are a few lines I would change or add... There's a couple of lines I don't understand how they fit into it... (im addicted to the sound of the rain
im safe from the rain)
And I would clean up the spelling a bit...
Hey... I don't usually nit pic like this... but u've got real talent here... there's definitely potential here... Keep writing... PM if u wnat to..
~Donna~ |
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Re: not tast nor smell but power!LOVE
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by Wachumiri on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 12:46:03 AM AEST
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Quite true. It's really good!
I love the way love will do that to you. Your whole world is changed by one simple thing, yet complex to if you think about it...
Take care.
David |
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