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Nome
Contributed by
TheSchroedmeister
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Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 01:50:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I saw a man in Nome
tell his daughter not to cry,
Through frosted glass I
reached for her, though
I could not ask her why
My fingers touched the window pane,
and within I felt the widow’s pain,
But no trace of this touch it kept,
No prints or smudges:
The widow wept.
From above the world,
Within the sky
I watched in Nome a widow cry,
And within herself,
With crystal eyes,
I watched in Nome a widow die.
Along the chilling ridge I hear
Tomorrow coming ever near,
And in its coming
yes, I fear
I must depart
I must disappear
December mornings seldom yield
their misery,
This, I know
But I have seen hell, my friends
And hell is cold
Copyright ©
TheSchroedmeister
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2004-04-30 13:50:07]
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Re: Nome
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by kailadragon on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 01:57:52 PM AEST
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| wow.......nice poem. it's sad though. great write and keep 'em comin |
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Re: Nome
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by Kie on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 02:06:40 PM AEST
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It is sad but it really turns the heart to liquid.
Very touching.
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Re: Nome
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by Black13 on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 02:13:30 PM AEST
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Your talent shines on this poem.
Very well written.
It was incredibly good. |
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Re: Nome
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 02:28:26 PM AEST
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I felt as if I were eavesdropping on someone's heart. I didn't want to breathe because they might hear me. This is very haunting, but beautiful.
Rita |
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by ksprincess42004 on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 03:09:32 PM AEST
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| This was a really touching poem. Great job, cant wait to read more. |
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Re: Nome
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by Kirby on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 04:18:15 PM AEST
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| Yes this was a sad poem but it was really nice and pretty good. Love:::Kirby |
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Re: Nome
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 04:51:40 PM AEST
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This was one of the most amazing poems I've ever read, EVER! It was sooooo sad! Wow, I could feel the widows pain. Thats great, SCRO... Great, awesome, amazing write.
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Re: Nome
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by bernard on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 10:22:37 AM AEST
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Boy what a poem. One could feel the widows pain also a regret in the poem. I emoted very well with this excellent piece.
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Re: Nome
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 11:07:17 AM AEST
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this is a great write, right down to the direct statement of the last two lines, rounded everything off nicely.
wildejohnny.
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Re: Nome
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 08:20:21 AM AEST
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One of my favourites of yours, and no mistake. Its cadence is magickal - I'm still stuck in putridsville, and you're away . . . away to Nome.
I would say that you're now my favourite poet here, for various reasons, one of which is that you write with equal grace, vision and cadence - all of which are pleasurable to my eye and mind.
Stars . . ? Not enough, even in the sky for this one. |
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Re: Nome
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 09:08:27 PM AEST
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Intriguing. Very intriguing. You have an interesting voice my friend.
Stitch |
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Re: Nome
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by Cancer on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 11:24:28 PM AEST
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very moving. whispered with such sadness that one can't help but believe it's real. amazing depth of sorrow. damn good.
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 10:31:30 PM AEST
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i love the way you laid this out and the words just flow so well, an excellent write, beautiful poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Nome
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:38:32 PM AEST
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This poem attaches itself to the reader's soul in the most amazing way. "The widow wept" - is incredibly impactful and heartreaching standing alone as you have it here. Very, very poignant, absolutely divine.
I'm tempted to toss responsibility aside and spend as long as it would take - reading everything you've posted. Ah, but that I could.
Thank you for this.... it is truly gift you've given us. |
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