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Eternity's Nightmare
Contributed by
Black13
on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 07:12:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Darkness lay waiting, in a graveyard's calm.
Fingers creep in gentle stillness to banshee's psalm.
Lovers hide, shaking, in frozen terror of what stalks.
Hunters come and go, in inky shadowed form, the undead that walks.
A game they played, has put them on death's train.
Invoked spirits, in chanted refrain, from a realm of eternal pain.
No circle, spell, or word can send invoked demon back to hell.
Only to pit will they return when all are left and empty shell.
Still they hide like frightened mice, while demons play.
She's told to run, his sacrifice, but the dead to not sway.
She hears his piercing screams, breathtakingly loud;
being torn to shreds by hating claws, while moon hides beind cloud.
Running 'til, lungs feel to explode, she finally hits her knees.
The price to hell is paid again, she knows she too will pay the fees.
Tears stream, while heart screams when she is cornered;
she begs and pleads, all hope surrendered.
Wicked grins filled with sharks teeth are all that greet.
She tries to fight, to get away, realizing she's just fresh meat.
She opens her eyes, thankful she's alive.
Sees her friends, all five.
She's so happy that she cries out ecstatic;
when she nears she knows that her eternity will not be copasetic.
Demons wait still grinning at her, wicked.
In the realm of hell, hope crushed, she dies again, tricked.
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Black13
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2004-04-29 19:12:12]
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 07:19:18 PM AEST
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wow, black...that is amazing. i cant wait to see your next one if that is warming up. that was brilliant. great images there.. i love the darkness. a great write. im definatly in awe...im going to read it again now.
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 07:21:55 PM AEST
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| sh*t, wished I'd tought of this Black. This is impressive, truly amazing. I loved every minute of it! |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by Kie on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 08:20:31 PM AEST
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Hello Black and welcome to YPDC.
I was impressed with your poem. I liked the rhyme scheme you used.
Really quite impressive.
Kie |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 09:49:00 PM AEST
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| What an awesome piece of dark poetry. I too am very much impressed. A tale written so well. |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by OMEGA_ on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 09:56:25 PM AEST
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wow wow
thats wonderful Black
really enjoing
well done |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by thumper on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 11:27:47 PM AEST
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This was gooood!! I like suprise endings! Very well written. If you're just warming up..... well dang!....Get on with it! I can't wait to read more!
Thumps ; 0 ) |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by thumper on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 11:30:08 PM AEST
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Oh and copasetic, you don't hear that too often. Love that word. K I'm done......
Thumps ; 0 ) |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by shelby on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 03:17:03 AM AEST
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gripping dark and spooky Im gonna have some nightmares for sure tonight........
Michelle |
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Re: Eternity's Nightmare
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by arden on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 07:01:50 PM AEST
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wow... by far one of my favorite writes by you.
a wonderful use of words.
chilling and dark.
very impressive write Black.
well done.
loved it.
Arden |
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