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Heading Home
Contributed by
remy
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Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 02:03:41 PM in AEST
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tear gas feats...
your gaze is steady
but no claims to defeat.
without these terms...
stick it in a wood block closing
where every feeling yearns.
wave me down
discarded words...
i've a habit to use them often
no matter as to how absurd.
and repugnance grows...
we don't seem that different
but i don't know.
assume the state of position
just like a conducive fiction
exchange a banter so succinctly
impaled as if that's how you take me
i'll remain in place underneath you
but try and again i couldn't be you...
no i couldn't be you.
wave me down
i'm heading home.
entangled fest...
i've a reason to walk away quickly
attending them less and less.
detached, i'm fine...
what's worth otherwise in telling
i repeat you this requited line.
the longing fades...
call me a quoted label conjured
i'd rather live a day today.
assume the make of condition
just like an elusive constriction
contain the game played so plainly
albeit trite i couldn't complain see:
the mass illusion calls for new venue
i wouldn't budge nor even pretend to...
no i won't pretend to.
[to my father, at a distance.]
Copyright ©
remy
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Re: Heading Home
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 02:24:41 PM AEST
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one word: wow.....
Dani xx |
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Re: Heading Home
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by Jackee_line on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 02:35:50 PM AEST
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| excellent work. |
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Re: Heading Home
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 04:03:49 PM AEST
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"what's worth otherwise in telling
i repeat you this requited line."
I fully appreciate that next line. I understand this sentiment all too well.
Excellent poem. I found it echoes such disenchanted sentiments . . . |
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Re: Heading Home
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by Thivanka on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 12:19:41 PM AEST
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Great poem, nice work.
-Thivanka |
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Re: Heading Home
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by JennyFruFru on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 12:53:11 PM AEST
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| me and my dad have been on bad terms for a long time now...... its sucks........... especially since we were so close....... im sorry you feel the same pain that i do......... it hurts a lot i know....... |
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Re: Heading Home
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by Juliet on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 03:01:32 PM AEST
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Great write. I love the line "wave me down
i'm heading home." Superb! |
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Re: Heading Home
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by priss on
Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 10:06:57 PM AEST
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| i love this poem, i find myself wanting to read it again and again. |
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Re: Heading Home
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by PRECIOUSBECKY on
Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 05:09:30 PM AEST
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WHO COULDN'T RELATE TO THIS-
"ENTAGLED FEST..... I'VE A REASON TO WALK AWAY QUICKLY
ATTENDING THEM LESS AND LESS."
I SO UNDERSTAND -GREAT WRITE |
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