|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
close ur eyes..imagine
Contributed by
damned
on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 12:25:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
Think of green meadow, lake, with blue sky,
Its such a "nice" day and everything’s alive,
Then picture urself there in the sky looking down,
All colors, blue, red, green, yellow, and brown,
The felling of the breeze is so refreshing,
Ur at peace and everything is so relaxing.
Feel so good that u have a warm heart,
But all of sudden everything becomes dark,
The clouds go black the breeze became wind,
The ground became dirt and the trees just bark,
U fall strait to the ground look for a warm place,
Inside some place where u can fit in,
Even though u find it to be dark,
That u can’t even see ur face,
The thought of being alone,
Makes u think ur gone,
In the dark ur scared,
Red eyes stared,
At u and ur soul,
A smell so foul,
Theres nothing but u,
Is that true?
Ur rotting,
Ur fading.
ur dust.
Copyright ©
damned
... [
2004-04-29 00:25:58]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: close ur eyes..imagine
(User Rating: 1 )
by Cassandra on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 03:33:30 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Ah very good poem. I love the layout it really works with the way slowly you're fading just like the sentences are getting shorter. It was also very imaginative and made me feel relaxed. Excellent style of poetry achieved! |
|
|
Re: close ur eyes..imagine
(User Rating: 1 )
by afraid_of_fear on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 05:55:07 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
this was a really good write.. i enjoyed reading it. the only thing i think i will say is that i thought the u's and ur's too something away from this wonderful poem which i found a little disappointing. but hey, just my opinion. excellent write nonetheless.
charlotte x_x_x |
|
|
Re: close ur eyes..imagine
(User Rating: 1 )
by damned on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 10:20:07 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| thnx for the criticism chartexxx |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
