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Last Word
Contributed by
Merry
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Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 06:55:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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It was not a kindhearted good-bye
Posturing with anger
Standing
Curtains fluttered behind you
I watched the cat lick its whiskers
While I tried not to cry
Sunset came through the open window
Washed us in golden light
Good night
Good bye
It's not the same thing
My lip trembled
Your mouth was an arrogant slash
Leaving me wounded
My own fault
I should have listened
Warning bells
But I was overconfident
Connected to all the right people
You simply resented me
Refused to step up
Preferring to take your meals with the dogs
I ridiculed your rebellion
Watched you try to be unique
Tiresome after so many attempts
In the end you ate alone
I went on to dinner at the McPherson's
That was the end of it, the last time we argued
Then we had nothing left to say
Copyright ©
Merry
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2004-04-27 18:55:59]
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Re: Last Word
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:14:18 PM AEST
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There is little then can singe the soul like the words...good bye. You have captured in this , a moment in time that I have known too often, and captured it perfectly.
Your talent never ceases to amaze me.
Roses
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Re: Last Word
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:19:43 PM AEST
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awwww!!! big hugs and lotsa love sis, nessa
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Re: Last Word
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:29:16 PM AEST
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Wow. Such a stark feeling. That sense of ending in more than just the words.
Good night
Good bye
It’s not the same thing
My lip trembled
Your mouth was an arrogant slash
Leaving me wounded
These are my favorite lines, but the whole thing is great.
Stitch |
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Re: Last Word
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by LovingWhispers on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:33:05 PM AEST
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BRAVO!!
This is excellent.
Such an abrupt goodbye captured brilliantly.
The curtains,light,cats whiskers...just really put me there.Amazing
Sharon |
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Re: Last Word
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by sugar0986 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:46:34 PM AEST
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This was a good poem.
~Brittany~ |
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Re: Last Word
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:52:14 PM AEST
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| Intresting read. I enjoyed it. :) |
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Re: Last Word
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 08:25:06 PM AEST
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such detail you took me right there I could feel the haunting sadness in each word. relating to this with goosebumps. your talent is wonderful but the pain that inspired the hurt in this poem is not right for you to go through..............
Michelle |
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