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Self Esteem?
Contributed by
alecfernadez
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Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:16:50 AM in AEST
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I'm so usless,
I'm a scared lil *****,
Everything I do is wrong,
Everything I say is *****,
I hate myself,
I wish I was dead,
Never touched a girl,
Never invited to a bed,
I'm a stupid pessamist,
And nobody likes me,
They ***** hate me,
Because all I say is *****,
Because I spend half my time depressed,
contemplating suicide,
For ***** sake give me a break,
Fat *****,
***** loser,
Its you, you lose,
When you throw up at night,
I despise you,
I ***** hate you,
I laugh when you cut yourself,
When you bleed to death,
You twisted piece of *****,
I hope you burn in hell,
Get outta my life,
Get outta everything
Because you dont belong,
You dont even exist,
By just breathing here,
Your taking this *****,
Letting your self get *****,
Letting yourself go,
Because you couldnt take the abuse,
Your a ***** liar,
You make sick,
I hope it hurts when you die,
And I kick your lifeless body,
And you decay into nothing,
As time goes bye,
I am a loser,
And everyone can see that,
So burn my eyes out,
With calcium carbonate,
Make me end this self pity,
Make me end this false torment,
Because I am you, you are me,
And I ***** hate that,
Because I ***** hate me
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alecfernadez
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2004-04-27 07:16:50]
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Re: Self Esteem?
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by Hurretje on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:30:13 AM AEST
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That's raw self-knowledge(?). I like it.
Greetz,
Hur
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Re: Self Esteem?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 07:36:10 AM AEST
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I'll be damned if I don't point this one out;
"Complementing suicide"
If that's supposed to be 'contemplating', its an ingenious error! I appreciate the self-hate in these words. I appreciate . . . this. |
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Re: Self Esteem?
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 08:10:07 AM AEST
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So much anger churning violently in this poem.
I've always thought you were talented and could write about a paperclip if so inclined and make it come alive. I'm saddened by this poem.
I think it is awesome that you use poetry to vent and I hope one day you grow to accept yourself and love that person so your talent can be freed.
The possibilities are endless Alec.
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Re: Self Esteem?
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by arden on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:32:13 AM AEST
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wow.
very powerful write.
filled with deep dark emotion.
wonderfully done.
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Re: Self Esteem?
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by Black13 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 10:58:47 AM AEST
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Very dark and twisted.
Psychotic to the extreme.
Nicely portrayed though.
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Re: Self Esteem?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 12:15:26 PM AEST
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I don't know...I usually like poems filled with raw emotion, but this one just seems so...trite?
I don't know...maybe it's the use of words like "liar" and "sick", and prases like "I hope it hurts when you die, And I kick your lifeless body"...it just seems like these words and word pictures have been used so frequently in anger poetry that the words have kind of lost most of their power.
If the measure of a poem is successfully communicating emotion, this poem succeds. If the measure is original word-smithing, this poem seems a little flat. |
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