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SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
Contributed by
strange_lindsey
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Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 10:06:24 PM in AEST
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An image of me peer, glares back from the mirror
Hatred bubbles, brew in her eyes
Shallow breath squeezes, pusjes out her chest
The blood boild, rages down her thighs.
A silhouette of me kneels, slouches down in excruciating pain
And laughs, mocks in excitement
She is slowly dying, bleeding and perishing
As a suicide, death indictment.
Favoring diseases, rotting more then normal
Expressive glimmer, fades off her face
Finish living, breathing collect your things
Something, malicious, horrible takes the place.
The lights flicker, flash into darkness
Her voice slips, scurries away
As magical as rebirth, lifeless in my shallow
Fading black, white style of day.
She flounders, floats as the top for a minute
Then she stops, ends as the ripples cease
This bathroom holds life, death in its bowels
As I peek, hide away to contemplate the release.
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Re: SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
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by Mortis-Dark on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 10:17:29 PM AEST
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OMG this is such a great write, I could see this happening awesome imagery. I have to say you are truly great.
Love your friend,
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Re: SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
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by Jolly on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 11:11:47 PM AEST
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| I guess I see myself. I just got out of the hospital..after slashing both wrists and severing an artery. My grandaughter witnessed me in a pool of bloody bathwater, which is a jacuzzi tub and it was bubbling. I never intended for her to witness such a thing..real life is not as pretty as fiction...your imagry was right on |
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Re: SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 12:32:52 AM AEST
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This bathroom holds life, death in its bowels
That line was awesome and I loved the, at times, overpowering description.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
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by silent on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 05:05:40 AM AEST
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| That was really a great poem Lindsey, hmm... |
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Re: SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
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by Kirby on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 01:57:19 PM AEST
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| This is such such such a deep and great poem. Wherever you got this out of your head from was pretty great. Keep em coimng like this. I really enjoyed it! Love:::Kirby |
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Re: SiLHoueTTe SuiCiDe
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by Stonedraider23 on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 01:15:46 PM AEST
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| great write |
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