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Devine Inspiration
Contributed by
Cynthia
on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 06:45:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Designed by: ~Linda's Signatures~
I think it was
you Leanne,
that gave me
the devine inspiration
to write about you.
You wanted me
to remember the memories
of what
you and I had.
I miss you
very much my friend,
I know you're
in Heaven with wings,
I remember and cherish
the times we had
together while we were little.
You passed away
at such a young age,
I still feel the
emptiness inside.
I wish you were
still here on
this green earth,
I hope that someday...
we'll be together again.
My sister,
my childhood friend.
Copyright Cynthia Jones
Jan.18/2004
Copyright ©
Cynthia
... [
2004-04-24 18:45:09]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
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Re: Devine Inspiration
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 07:23:35 PM AEST
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What a beautifully loving tribute to your childhood friend. You have a huge heart.
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Re: Devine Inspiration
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 07:25:46 PM AEST
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This poem is a nice dedication; it's a pleasing read. I like the structure, with the varying sized stanzas, and I definitely appreciated the complete absence of clichéd rhymes.
With that said, I wish the author of this poem had delved more into what she misses about Leanne, instead of just telling me that she misses her friend. For example, does the author miss playing dolls with her 6-year-old friend, or does she miss hanging out and getting high with her 15-year-old friend? I don't really know much about Leanne, or the author's deep feelings about her from this poem.
For me to feel engaged with the emotion the author feels, I need to be able to understand the author's feelings. As a reader, I was looking for more word-pictures in this tribute poem so I could feel the author's depth of emotion regarding the loss.
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Re: Devine Inspiration
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by loveisendless on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 07:30:04 PM AEST
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A GOOD FRIEND YOU ARE! NICE POEM WITH A MESSAGE OF REMEMBERANCE!!
GREAT ONE CYNTHIA!!!
LOL-DAN!!!! |
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Re: Devine Inspiration
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by arden on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 11:07:06 AM AEST
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awww this is really sad :(
nicely written though and i like the picture.
well done.
Arden |
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