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rose in a concrete world
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 07:00:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
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she is a rose in a concrete world,
standing out in a land that has little beauty,
surrounded by thorns,
scratching and abusing her...
she feels she has no-one to turn to,
locked in her own personal cage,
she constantly tries to break free,
but only learns that she bleeds,
shes in a prison, never to escape,
no-where to run, no-where to hide,
surrounded by cruelty and darkness,
she wishes she could die,
she cannot breathe,
she cannot see,
she cannot feel,
she cannot live,
she wants to die...
but she knows that she must survive..
..a rose in a concrete world..
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by Brians_Sweety on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 07:12:14 PM AEST
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| one word WOW.... Wait two more GREAT WRITE!! |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 07:12:45 PM AEST
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great style and flow, wonderful poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by Black13 on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 07:15:26 PM AEST
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Such a sad write.
Very well written but oh so sad.
I liked it.
I hope you survive as well.
If you ever need anyone to talk to... |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by blackmarker on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 08:01:17 PM AEST
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Wonderful.. so sad.. I feel like that sometimes. Not exactly like that.. but, I mean, I can relate.
Awesome job. |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by Kie on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 08:05:28 PM AEST
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So many thoughts pertaining to your poem. Concrete cracks into many lines and when those cracks happen plants grow thru and flourish. HOw? I don't know, but it happens. Little rose do not give up because the concrete will always be here but the beauty of a rose in bloom makes concrete pale anyday and no matter how bad things are right now they will get better.
Very touching poem.
Kie |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by spiffyphil on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 08:17:28 PM AEST
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| very strong, very good. |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by Stitch on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 09:14:28 PM AEST
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Don't we all just feel sometimes that we fit nowhere and yet there is no choice but to keep pressing forward. I think you are at a juncture in your life. You keep writing girl, and you will find your path.
Stitch |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by kidpoet_213 on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 09:17:08 PM AEST
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AWESOME WRITE!! This is something that every one of us can relate to...
In fact I know quite a few...
Things have got to get better... because the best is yet to come...
I know u've heard this before... if u ever need someone to talk with... I'm here...
~Donna~ |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 09:52:27 PM AEST
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"Concrete Girl don't fall down into the broken world around you"
"Concrete Girl" - Switchfoot
this reminded me of that quote. You should look that song up... it's hope for another day. Awesome write, though sad.
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by OMEGA_ on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 02:55:23 PM AEST
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| really great, am looking forward to read more of your works |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by silent on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 07:49:19 PM AEST
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| Bloody good write, a reminder of this so called wonderful world. |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by arden on
Monday, 26th April 2004 @ 06:06:04 PM AEST
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i loved this.
so well written and full of deep sad emotion.
wonderfully done.
keep up the amazing work.
Arden |
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Re: rose in a concrete world
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 12:57:57 PM AEST
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amazing.. i absolutely love the title, and how you've used the same first and last line.. perfect..
charlotte x_x_x |
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