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It Ain't What I Want
Contributed by
New_York_Chick
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Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 05:54:29 PM in AEST
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Things are not working out
the way they should be
I can surely see
myself without you
But it ain't what I want
How can I be sure if I will get
another chance
That we will dance
at a better time
This will be disastrous
I know that I have not said
what I meant
Don't want to hear you spent
your love on another
I should be the one
You seem to like me better
when I'm this way
But today
I just might leave
Watch me get up and go
Here comes my pride again
getting in between
I want you to lean
on right now
I'm too scared to admit
It's probably my fault you never
told what I know
I feel so low
When I'm alone
I honestly want you back
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Re: It Ain't What I Want
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 05:59:41 PM AEST
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Ain't it true.....good write....
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Re: It Ain't What I Want
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by Rhei76 on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 06:06:53 PM AEST
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| God bless you. Tell him what you know. try to break down the walls that are hold things back. Communication come before trust. But remember patients is a virtue, don't push or rush. If things are ment to be, things well happen. Peace, love, and hope to you. |
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Re: It Ain't What I Want
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by Kie on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 07:42:45 PM AEST
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Well your poem did a great job expressing your emotions and how you feel. It was also well constructed and it flowed in a pleasant way. I hope things get easier for you and that it all works out. Enjoyed reading this one.
Kie |
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Re: It Ain't What I Want
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by kidpoet_213 on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 09:37:02 PM AEST
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A good write... very well expressed... thoughts and emotions are hard sometimes to put down on paper and u did a good job here with this...
~Donna~ |
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Re: It Ain't What I Want
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 01:49:39 AM AEST
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beautiful poem I liked how certain words were in italics really added to the poem as a whole.
Bobo (Joel) |
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