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A Little Man
Contributed by
fldadn1
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Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 06:25:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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There was a little man
Who had no mouth
All the thoughts he was thinking
He could not speak out
He had ideas of peace
And thoughts of love
And everything was wonderful
Of what he thought of
War was not an issue
And pain did not exist
All the thoughts he thought of
Could be more than a wish
This same little man
With no mouth had no hands
Threw all the differences
This man stayed glad
He tried his hardest
To explain his ideas
But everyone just ignored him
Still he try’s again and again
Finally he gave up
His ideas were to hard to get through
He thought, “It’s impossible with these people
When explaining by clues.�
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Re: A Little Man
(User Rating: 1 ) by lil_angel on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 07:04:54 PM AEST (User
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Very thought making LOL well done! |
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Re: A Little Man
(User Rating: 1 ) by Black13 on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 07:05:30 PM AEST (User
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I think this was a rather good poem but it could have used fewer 'of's. It was slightly excessive in use. It messes up the flow for me in a few spots. I think the overall poem was rather unique and I enjoyed it. I do think the final stanza could have been worded better. |
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Re: A Little Man
(User Rating: 1 ) by New_York_Chick on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 07:08:22 PM AEST (User
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hmm interesting
i wonder who this one was about |
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Re: A Little Man
(User Rating: 1 ) by Remy on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 10:41:28 PM AEST (User
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i like charades... keen writing, interesting concept, i love it! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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