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See Me
Contributed by
Mortis-Dark
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Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:40:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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Through and through
Its obvious.
I recollected everything.
Feeling a little bit dissapointed.
You dont see me.
I put the past behind me.
No longer a fallen angel.
I exepected a little bit too much.
My life the tragedy.
How you gaze into my soul.
Your the only star that graces my sky.
You know you can save me.
But you dont see me.
How was I to you.
My skin against yours.
Thoughts of you blanket my ceiling.
Left inside this veil you put upon me.
Done cast me out.
Not yet.
I wont run.
Please no just listen.
Your voice is rising,
Please dont yell.
I cant take this right now.
Let me be your light.
Your special to us.
To me most of all.
Just put the past behind.
But still you just dont see me.
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Mortis-Dark
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Re: See Me
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by shelby on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:46:33 PM AEST
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its the hardest thing when someone wont look deep inside to a person you projected your feelings well Ill be watching for more of your work.
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Re: See Me
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by Rhei76 on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 06:02:19 PM AEST
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| Good poem. I don't know if it is because I'm listening to tool right now. But I can feel and put your word to stink-fist that is no offence to you it's just the song that was on when I read this. Not to mention if looking thru manyard state and sound I could feel this with most of their songs. Take care, God bless |
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Re: See Me
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by Kie on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 06:20:28 PM AEST
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Okay i'm officially a fan. I think this is a poem that everyone at least once in their lives can relate to.
"How you gaze into my soul.
Your the only star that graces my sky.
You know you can save me.
But you dont see me."
Priceless and I wish I had written that stanza!
Kie
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Re: See Me
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 06:25:24 PM AEST
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truely lovely:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: See Me
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 06:37:25 PM AEST
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Great job! You've captured well the feeling of grief and frustration when someone you love won't understand you.
Hang in there.
Andrew |
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Re: See Me
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by Remy on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 07:50:52 PM AEST
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oi, wish i could come across these words for myself... hope the awkwardness doesn't linger still... good writing. ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: See Me
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 12:42:32 AM AEST
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Wonderful write, Mortis. I think probably one of your better poems. Great use of your unique style and just great all around.
Lindsey |
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