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The Worlds Cadaver
Contributed by
purplestary
on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 03:17:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
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sutured and fallen
your cadaver
breathless and numb
you to blame
bleeding and pulseless
my time is here
my turn to cry
my time to die
wishing to stay
but happy to go
the end of me
the start of you
screaming with silence
afraid of this moment
the moment of truce
what can i do
my time to bleed
to be set free
my time to forget
to leave this *****
sutured and fallen
the worlds cadaver
wanting to stay
but happy to go
my turn to cry
my time to die.
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Re: The Worlds Cadaver
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by Remy on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 03:22:27 PM AEST
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interesting way of putting it, wish i could hear the story behind it... good write! ;0)
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Re: The Worlds Cadaver
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:08:01 PM AEST
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i know the feeling and i know good poetry well done!
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Re: The Worlds Cadaver
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by therazorskiss on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 06:50:38 PM AEST
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| I think your poem is okay. You should probably work on stanza and nonchalantaties. Your alacritous nature appears even through your 'depressing' poetry. Try to write more about how you feel, not how the world treats you. |
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