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A Bloodied Chalice
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:15:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I am the face of failure
As I bleed into this chalice
Broken by my own animosity
As fear tightens its noose
And slices vein after vein
Leaving me thin and despondent
I take the bloodied chalice
Into my stained, blackened hands
And tip it over my head
The blood christening my hair
And pooling, congealing at my feet
I raise my shaking arms heavenward
As life flows from the crevasses in my skin
And ponder if I have been freed from the demons
Of if my torture has only begun
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2004-04-22 14:15:20]
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by SAT on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:20:54 PM AEST
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Deep, Dark and very revealing... loved it! keep up the good work!
Alicia MAire
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by Remy on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:26:12 PM AEST
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if only i could use my sacry voice to say something like, "and you thought that was bad... bwahawha!!" it just doesn't have that same effect, oh well... cool write! ;0)
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by afraid_of_fear on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:28:16 PM AEST
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Joel this is incredible.. shorter than usual but definitely worth reading. I absolutely love the line: "The blood christening my hair". It just held something.. different, controversial maybe. i liked it :)
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by Kie on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 03:11:58 PM AEST
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Oh this was sad to read.
It had a helplessness to it that really touched me.
Dark and very well expressed.
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:05:42 PM AEST
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I wrote something called "Burden" after seeing The Passion that this reminds me of. I can relate to all the questions posed here and all the experience written into it. Nice stuff. God does allow us to fall pretty far before He stretches out His hand and even then we find it hard to believe we are on solid ground. Yes, I know these feelings and you have described them with both depth and clarity.
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by Mortis-Dark on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:53:09 PM AEST
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This is what I would call an esquisite write, im awaiting further more of your writes.:D
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by shelby on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:56:07 PM AEST
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haunting and dark gripping with feeling wrapped up with such sadness another great write Joel.
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Re: A Bloodied Chalice
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 06:06:29 PM AEST
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This was disturbingly sweet, and extrodinarily exceptional. Thank you for sharing.
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