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8:18
Contributed by
rhei76
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Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 12:34:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
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8/18, DIRTY WET MUD, BY THREE DAYS OUT OF
CELL, PHONE CALL AFTER DRUNK, PAST 7 WITH
RAIN, ON 2 GALLONS OF HOME BREW & AN oz.
SOME ONE ELSE GREW.
PHONE CALL AFTER DRUNK, "SHE LEFT, I DON'T
KNOW WHERE, FOR THREE DAYS, SHE'S GONE",
AFTER THAT CALLED HER DAD, HE SOUNDED JUST
NUMB, I THOUGHT HE LIED, A BAD JOKE, A
BROKEN INFINITE TUNNEL I NEVER CONCIEVED, I
PRAYED THAT HE WAS LIEING.
HUNG UP THE PHONE & WALKED OUTSIDE, WHERE I
COULD FEEL NUMB, NO TEARS IN THE LIGHTENING
RAIN, AS ANGER BREWED FOR I COULD NOT CRY,
I STOOD IN THE CENTER OF SNAPDRAGON, WITH
MY FIST RAISED HIGH, ASKING WHY, WHY, WHY
I LOST MY HOLY TEMPLE, I LOST MY PUREST
SOUL, & I BECAME DIRTY, WET, & MUD, 8/18
Dillon Rhie
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rhei76
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2004-04-22 00:34:56]
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Re: 8:18
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by emystar on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 12:42:17 AM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: 8:18
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by Alyssa on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 12:43:24 AM AEST
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Very touching poem. I really felt your pain; it moved me. I'm sorry for your loss.
love always,
alyssa |
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Re: 8:18
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by katyqueen35 on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 12:50:19 AM AEST
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| wow sorry to hear that.good write. |
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Re: 8:18
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by lil_angel on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 12:52:00 AM AEST
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| Very sweet excellent job! |
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Re: 8:18
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by venkat on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 01:26:22 AM AEST
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| Neither one is lost..deeply immerced..yet it can be a temporary emotion..well written. venkat |
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Re: 8:18
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by Kie on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:51:01 PM AEST
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I thought your poem was good but when I see caps it reminds me of yelling and takes away from the read on the poem. It was like reading a story that was so sad and it made me think of the times i've looked at the clock and remembered those tragic moments forever.
I enjoyed this.
Kie |
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