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One-way Ticket
Contributed by
evryrose
on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 01:25:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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These weights are bearing down on me
Burdens upon my shoulders
Suffocating me in the expanse of what they Encompass
Kness buckling under the heaviness
I push it all away
In hopes that some unseen force will lift these Weights
Only to reveal my broken body and crushed spirit
Choking and sputtering upon introduction of air Into my lungs
Crying because its just too much
Too much for one person
Too much for a little girl with a teddy bear in one Hand
And a one-way ticket in the other
Copyright ©
evryrose
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2004-04-21 01:25:09]
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Re: One-way Ticket
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 01:29:47 AM AEST
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Very good writing.
U have that artistic flair.
Luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: One-way Ticket
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by eternallyloved on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 01:36:46 AM AEST
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Great write. Really paints a picture, i can just see this sad little girl. I hope to read more of your work as this was very impressive. Keep it up.
~Shayna |
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Re: One-way Ticket
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by paper-heart-hero on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 01:38:05 AM AEST
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| this was awesome. the pressures of life are too much sometimes and you get the point across very well. great job. ~James |
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Re: One-way Ticket
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 01:45:27 AM AEST
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I loved this peice, so good
sad but soo good! I really liked this part
Too much for a little girl with a teddy bear in one Hand
And a one-way ticket in the other
That picture sticks in my mind! Great job! |
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Re: One-way Ticket
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by Vickie on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 02:02:51 AM AEST
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| very good write!! stress and pain take a toll on our lives...especially when we're still young! keep up the good work |
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Re: One-way Ticket
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 21st April 2004 @ 02:18:02 AM AEST
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so sad and full of pain you conveyed your message well in this write
michelle |
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