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Feeling, dealing oh look I'm growing!
Contributed by
little_genna
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Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 12:10:56 PM in AEST
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You sit there and dictate my life from afar.
Just waiting to create a war.
Constantly moaning because I haven’t done this or that.
Like some little exasperating gnat.
I may have become despondent.
What can I say this is my current state.
I’m feeling my own type of lament.
So far you just think I’m hell bent.
It’s only natural to grieve, even if the love is not the same.
Sorry if this is mistaken as being lame.
I’m not a nasty individual.
Yet neither am I a sweet innocent damsel.
If I have no feeling,
Why have I finished healing?
I wouldn’t have been able to deal.
Just conceal.
I’m growing up so I need my space.
So please do it with grace.
I’ve never been much trouble.
Always tried to be careful.
I know it’s only natural that you will find this hard,
Nevertheless I still remain unscarred.
All you need to do is let go a little every so often.
I promise I will try not to come home drunk and fallen.
Just trust me that is all I ask
I know it will be a difficult task.
So please spare me the lecture.
They have all just become a blur.
If I have no feeling,
Why have I finished healing?
I wouldn’t have been able to deal.
Just conceal.
If I have no feeling
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Re: Feeling, dealing oh look I'm growing!
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 12:59:15 PM AEST
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| i really like this poem especially the phrase 'i have no feeling why have i finished healing?' i can really relate to this! well done! |
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Re: Feeling, dealing oh look I'm growing!
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 01:40:56 PM AEST
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interesting write... thou i'm sure you have some feeling, somewhere...
~Remy~ |
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Re: Feeling, dealing oh look I'm growing!
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by gmcse8 on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 11:27:20 AM AEST
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| GOD, I LIKED THIS ONE. I MEAN REALLY LIKED. IT. I WAS HOOKED AT THE TITLE. HOW DID YOU COME UP WITH THAT? THE TITLE MADE ME SMILE BEFORE I EVEN STARTED READING. PLUS THE TITLE TOLD ME EVERYTHING I WAS GOING TO READ, REALLY INSPIRED STACE. ANYWAY AS I READ IT WAS LIKE I SAID, IT WAS WHAT THE TITLE TOLD ME TO EXPECT. ETERNAL STRUGLE BETWEEN YOUNG ADULT AND PARENT. YOUNG PERSON WANTING TO PUSH THE ENVELOPE AND PARENT WANTING TO KEEP THE FLAP CLOSED ON IT. LOL. AND THE VOICE JUST BORED WITH THE STRUGGLE, NOT MAD, NOT SAD, APATHETIC ON THIS DAY. OR THATS WHAT I FELT ANYWAY. REALLY LIKED THE 1ST AND 4TH LINES OF THE FIRST STANZA, AND ALSO LIKED THE REPEATING QUESTION, "WHY HAVE I FINISHED HEALING". BUT YOU KNOW HOW I LIKE QUESTIONS IN POEMS. SOMEDAY YOU WILL HAVE TO TELL ME ALL THE ANSWERS TO ALL THE QUESTIONS. ONE SECTION I REALLY LIKED BECAUSE IT CATCHES THAT STRUGLE YOUR DESCRIBING SO WELL. "JUST TRUST ME THAT IS ALL I ASK, I KNOW IT WILL BE A DIFFICULT TASK" I KNOW I HAD TOLD YOU I DISLIKED PEOPLE WHO SAY "BEEN THERE DONE THAT", BUT HAVE BEEN AND DID ON THIS ONE. MADE ME SMILE AND HOLD A GOOD THOUGHT FOR MY OWN DAUGHTER. OF COURSE WE HAD THIS CONVERSATION AND BATTLE. LAST I LIKED THE LINE "THEY HAVE ALL BECOME A BLUR" OR AS A PARENT WOULD SAY IT "IN ONE EAR AND OUT THE OTHER". I SMILED WHILE READING THE WHOLE POEM BUT THE SARCASM I HEARD FROM THIS VOICE AND FAMILIARITY I FELT WITH THE WORDS ALTHOUGH I HAD NEVER READ THEM BEFORE INSURED I WAS GOING TO SMILE. AND AGAIN BRAVO ON THE TITLE, JUST TO GOOD. THANKS FOR THIS ONE BOB |
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