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Cliff hanger
Contributed by
Zexen
on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:05:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I’m stood atop a cliff,
The sea breeze is blowing through my hair and filling my nostrils,
The sky is dark with storm clouds,
I look down ad see the drop before me,
All I want to do is jump,
Too end my suffering,
I stand and think,
I’m being greedy,
It would end my suffering,
But what of my family?,
They would suffer because of me,
Or do I think too much of my-self?,
Why would it cause any one pain if I was no longer here?,
Then,
From behind me I can hear a voice call out to me,
It’s telling me to stop and think,
But that’s what I’ve just done,
Or did I?,
Why is my mind so clouded?,
No,
I realise this is foolishness,
I turn to back away from the cliff but as I do I slip,
I can feel the ground slipping from beneath me,
I close my eyes knowing what is coming,
I start to fall,
I can hear a woman scream,
I’m still falling,
Still falling?,
I should have hit the floor by now,
Why haven’t I?,
I open my eyes,
I haven’t stopped,
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Zexen
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2004-04-19 13:05:03]
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Re: Cliff hanger
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by purplestary on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:50:32 PM AEST
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| nice write!! i love the ending...i could really feel that...you just said what i wish i knew how to say.... |
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Re: Cliff hanger
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 11:32:11 PM AEST
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| excelent writing style. but suicidal feelings arent so great now are they? |
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Re: Cliff hanger
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by ammalu on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 02:25:27 AM AEST
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| theme well narrated - ofcourse, can be more positive suggestion - good write - keep it up. |
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