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dying petals
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:33:43 PM in AEST
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i watch them fall...
silent, sad, dying,
not caring at all,
just like me...
graceful hurt,
flowing silently,
sinking to the ground,
losing part of themselves...
as they fall apart...
not worried about how they land,
slowly they crumble to dust,
the same as my heart did over you...
darkness surrounds them,
beauty in shadow.
i watch them as i sit and cry,
tears from glass eyes,
gleaming in the disappearing light.
...as dying rose petals fall to the floor.
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Re: dying petals
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:36:10 PM AEST
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Beautifully penned piece. I can relate to this poem very well at this point in time. The emptiness and cold feeling inside you. You hurt, but you don't feel. Strange place to be.
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Re: dying petals
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:39:39 PM AEST
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well worth the read, nice one!
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Re: dying petals
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by Stitch on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:47:13 PM AEST
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And the healing begins. Lovely, lovely images. Nice work.
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:50:50 PM AEST
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this was rad I loved the image of tears gleaming in the disappearing light. A lovely poem. Keep it up.
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Re: dying petals
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by parkman on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:03:12 PM AEST
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| Beautiful imagery and a lovely piece to read |
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Re: dying petals
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by shelby on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:14:13 PM AEST
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you painted a beautiful picture with this write nice comparrison with your feelings and the rose petals dropping to the ground.
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Re: dying petals
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by purplestary on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 02:31:53 PM AEST
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| great great write..nice imagery..can't wait to read more.. |
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Re: dying petals
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by Randibee85 on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 08:21:47 PM AEST
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That's melancholy, but sweet. I cannot elaborate...
It's that good...
You're a great writer. |
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Re: dying petals
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:41:38 AM AEST
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| Stunning write, I could picture the dying rose so clearly in my head. It reminds me of the rose in Disney's Beauty and The Beast. |
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Re: dying petals
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by Leoniboge on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 10:00:52 AM AEST
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Another beautiful poem you've written, hun... I love it.... it's like you've painted a canvas with moving pictures of myself which haunt it. Amazing!
Leo xxXXxx |
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Re: dying petals
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 01:41:17 PM AEST
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| Wow. That was beautiful, amazing, and hooked me the minute I started reading it. There are no words to serve it justice. It's just too beautiful. |
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