|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Seven Scars
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:45:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
Bleeding lonely words onto the floor
Empty eyes staring into nothingness
A broken face hidden on his bed
I've produced nothing
Only stolen at will
And I love these seven scars,
Seven scars to keep me whole
Seven scars to personify pain
Seven scars to watch me as I drown
This filth keeps me pinned down
As I stroke these rocks, frantically
Can't take any more misery
Even as its shoved down my throat
Equivocating on every point
And I love these seven scars,
Seven scars to keep me whole
Seven scars to hold me down
Seven scars to scream I'm nothing
My face took in your disease
As I reveled in your pain
Lapping up every lie you sold me
So pathetic, as you tore down my defences
So ironic, that I was the one to fall
And I love these seven scars,
Seven scars to keep me whole
Seven scars to keep me bleeding (weakened)
Seven scars to provoke me to fall
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
... [
2004-04-16 20:45:03]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by Kie on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:54:35 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Dark, angry and sinister. It gives me chills. Which is a good thing of course.
I'll be thinking about those 7 scars all night.
*Lights up the house like an airplane runway*
LOL
Kie |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by SpreadYourWings on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 09:47:26 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| i really enjoyed this poem as i relate to much of what you have said. keep going! |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 09:55:52 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Whoa, this was seriously impressive. It may be my new favorite of yours, and considering how good your others are, that's saying a lot. Dark, haunting, powerful, enthralling . . . had me glued from the first line on in. Fantastic job, keep it up. You have a fan.
--Nora |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 10:18:35 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Captivating and chilling... Good write, Joel...
Jenni |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 02:32:06 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Captivating.. very dark, angry and chilling. loved its read..venkat |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by afraid_of_fear on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 06:54:47 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This is so good.. i really enjoyed reading it.. i love the repetition.. you manage to inspire and amaze me with every write.. good stuff Joel..
charlotte xx |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 08:41:47 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Darker than dark, this leaves a distinct impression on the reader--the vision, anger and sadness etched in my memory. This is good, this is damn good. Hell, even the title is awesome!
Truly,
-V.S. |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 01:14:03 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| hey joel, wonderfuly written poem, love your first line,"Bleeding lonely words onto the floor" it drew me right in, the reality in your poetry is always so down to earth and brilliant, keep writing:) hugs n' love nessa |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by arden on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 04:30:38 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
dark and chilling. stunningly written. i enjoyed it. well done keep it up.
Arden |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by CuttersAngel on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 05:16:20 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
damn... i wish i had only seven scars... but as you know i've reached two hundred and somethin... i havent counted in a while.. good poem.. i like it..
cilla
|
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by wyrd_faerie on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 03:44:26 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| wow...this is so, so amazing...wow... |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by alecfernadez on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 01:34:16 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
this poem is so filled with anger, pain and frustation (i think) and it is simply awsome. On another note, is that why their are 7 deadly sins, instead of like 8, or 6? Cos I can think of loads of other evil sins then just 7. Dante must have done it so it sounds cool, or cos the 7 sins is perfection or somethin like that. DOnt mind me i'm rantin...
(I have bronchitis) |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by Stitch on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 09:10:25 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Fascinating write. It certainly held my attention all the way through. No easy feat. Much to ponder. I like this.
Stitch |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 06:09:41 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This was a very interesting poem. Every piece fell perfectly into place and it kept me yearning for more.
Lindsey |
|
|
Re: Seven Scars
(User Rating: 1 )
by Living_In_My_Dream on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 07:04:35 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Thanks for your wise comment....I know I am strog...*shrugs* but I feel weak...like I can't do anything right...except...cut...I know that it is a har dthing to cope with....and I have *looks around* 227 scars on my arms and legs...and I know wish they were only 7...I hate myself...but then I want to live...I dont want to die....Im not suicidal...but I have cut for 3 1/2 years and it has resulted in a bad story to tell...to anyone who will listem...but I hate it...i really do...I think you have talent and an great flow to your words...keep it coming |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
