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Falling
Contributed by
xoblondiebabix3
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Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 07:24:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Im falling
So low
Im balling
Drowns of tears
Who are my peers
That really care
They hurt me
And they arent fair
Im falling
So low
No one can stop me
My pain doesnt show
This has got to be
I was meant to fall
I cant take it anymore
Someday I wont be falling
Ill have fallen
To a dark dark place
Because thats where i belong
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Re: Falling
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by Rhei76 on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 12:18:19 AM AEST
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nicely written.
I'm on writters block so I'm just reading and commenting.
Now, how long have you been falling?
Because bark place can be home without a light. And once that light turns on everything is more comfortable.
And with the falling since you've been in the dark without hitting the bottem, maybe your flying. You just haven't had the light to see.
As for your peers, they might not be fair, but that is because they are scared of the falling
they are induring.
You know like little school boy picks on little school girl because he doesn't know how to show her he likes her.
It's like a born again christian preaching and condemning others because it helps them see past there own faults, While they put them on others.
It's like a displacement thing.
But some of us understand, well not fully but if you need some one to vent to you have thousands here, who will listen.
please be safe. |
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Re: Falling
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by Queen_Dolly on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 02:39:26 AM AEST
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This is beautiful and there's the sense of a struggle.
I hope you'll never reach that dark place, but fall to somewhere pretty =)
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Re: Falling
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 04:22:57 PM AEST
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ahh I've been there before I can relate to this poem. I won't sell u any B.S. and I'll just say that sooner or later you will get out of yer dark place and see the light... just keep on fighting and writing awesome stuff like this.
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