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Day-time Stargazing
Contributed by
Nelly
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Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 06:03:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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The only star I see is thee
At day-time.
You never seize to shine.
Life-giving
Though light years outlying.
Someday you shall exhaust.
But even after death
You shall never seize to shine.
For your light reaches me
From afar,
Even later after you smile.
At day-time I gaze,
And never fail
To see your face.
So at night still I seek
But no longer find your smile
So lovely and oh so sweet.
Oh heaven has betrayed me!
Where does it hide thee?
Shining on someone else’s world
I know you are
Not mine. No one else’s.
But you sense at once I know,
The deepest of my sorrow.
And so you’ll make me smile once more
By the time you rise tomorrow.
Copyright ©
Nelly
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2004-04-16 06:03:08] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Day-time Stargazing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Hurretje on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 06:42:15 AM AEST (User
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Wonderful ode to the sun!
I like it.
Hur |
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Re: Day-time Stargazing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:16:19 AM AEST (User
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I agree. Original and good. Being pedantic, I'd go ask Mick if he could change 'seize' to 'cease', as (i may be under a wrong impression) you have used this word to mean 'take' or 'grasp' when its context is in cessation, or ending.
Just a thought. Fine poem, regardless.
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Re: Day-time Stargazing
(User Rating: 1 ) by reprobate on
Wednesday, 5th May 2004 @ 05:02:46 AM AEST (User
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good job. |
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