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Acid Rain Drops
Contributed by
strange_lindsey
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Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:16:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Close your eyes-
Shield yourself from the visions of violence
Breath in the fresh air-
Before it gets too polluted
Stick your tongue out-
To taste the acid rain drops.
It is burning and itching
A scab that you pick at
Opens up new wounds
And exposes what was once covered up.
Take a shower
To wash away all bad memories
But it is only temporary
Because tonight they will reappear as nightmares.
Sit in the corner
Rock back and forth
Find that comfort of a cage
You remember so well.
Atleast you knew that as long as the closet stayed locked
You stayed out of harms way.
Thank God for that much.
Squeezing your fists so tight
Only sheds more blood on the carpet
Fingernails dig into the flesh
What a beautiful sight.
You know its gotten bad
When it takes pain
To feel anything at all.
You know its gotten bad
When every breath
Is caught because of fear.
You know its gotten bad
When you cry
Just to feel all right.
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strange_lindsey
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:30:22 AM AEST
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Lindsey, wow...this poem is incredible. From the title (which draws the reader in), to the elaborate descriptions and dire images, I was left with a haunted feeling. This is so vivid, so well written...definitely a five star gem from top to bottom.
Truly,
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by Hurretje on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:45:34 AM AEST
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O, this is just so sad and well described. You really know how to put cutting images to a feeling only by using words. Great stuff and keep it up!
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by shelby on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:47:17 AM AEST
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raw emotions in this superb write
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by emystar on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 04:49:50 AM AEST
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Very sad but real.
You really did a great job with this write.
Luv, huggs, hope,
emy |
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by arden on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 01:26:20 PM AEST
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wow... this is one powerful write. so deep and full of meaning. i just love this. so wow and amazing. wonderfully written. well done.
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by AspenGlow on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 06:50:55 PM AEST
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| I like this one much. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by JennyFruFru on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:15:00 PM AEST
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| awww hun i can so relate to the last three lines... i cry and cry and cry some more over all sorts of things... the world has gotten so bad ... its just cruel anymore... hang in there :) your write terrificly expressed your feelings :) |
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by face-in-the-crowd on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 09:05:16 AM AEST
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| Wow, that was deep. I'm speechless. |
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by silent on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 09:10:39 PM AEST
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Very psych, that's powerful, almost perfect to. That was an exceptional poem, bit troubling but excellent.....
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 02:07:40 PM AEST
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that was ocean deep! you have an incredible mind.
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Re: Acid Rain Drops
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by mountainhigh on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 05:11:48 AM AEST
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So sad, cry just to feel all right, yes I know that too. Know also to come here and seek special words from special souls.
Thank you again for saving this one from tears. |
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