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Tortured Bliss
Contributed by
fallen_eyes
on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 05:37:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Swept of my feet.............
Flush in my cheeks
........Colours all hazed
Feelings all blurred
A warmth does swarm...........
Chills do sweep
The perfect site...........Take the picture
It tastes so sweet.......
makes me feel weak
.......Caught in a daze
My words all slurred
A posion formed...........
Sinking in deep
The stolen fight.............Take the picture
Strength of a fleet..........
Pleasure you seek
..........Your power pays
You speak the word
To me your torn...........
Tortured my sleep
The missing light.......Take the picture
You stole my heart...........
Threw it away
.........For I will fall
Into your bliss
No need to care...........
Do it again
For one last kiss........Take the picture
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2004-04-15 17:37:08]
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Re: Tortured Bliss
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by reilt on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 05:51:22 PM AEST
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| really liked this poem...the repition is very effective...well done |
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Re: Tortured Bliss
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 06:02:44 PM AEST
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Wow.. picks jaw up off foor...
Tammy this is amazing
i love the rhythm and style, the way the reader gets caught up in your emotions durng the second stanza and how the vivid imagery at the start is replaced by the underlying cold and harsh truth within your words, though the vivid imagery is kept and held strong throughout the entire piece
Beautiful, capitvating, involving and somewhat relatable in an odd way
A joy to read from start to finish
Luke xxxxxx |
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