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Battles Within
Contributed by
Putteragain
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Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 04:13:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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torn within this outer shell
every moment a living hell
picket fence where i reside
can not pick either side
grass is greener over there
hiding in satans lair
always wanting something more
not waiting by my golden shore
gold and platinum i desire
food and water i require
happy in this very skin
not today its way to thin
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Putteragain
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Re: Battles Within
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by waos on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 04:36:11 PM AEST
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i love it...that is so awesome!!! i can understand a bit of what you feel...i could feel all the indecision and dissatisfaction in it.
keep writing.
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Re: Battles Within
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 04:48:26 PM AEST
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gold and platinum i desire
food and water i require
so true we all have our earthly desires.
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Re: Battles Within
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by Kie on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 04:50:28 PM AEST
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Guess what? You are human like the rest of us. I suffer from the same afflictions. I ride the fence alot and I look out onto greener pastures and then I look at my well worn yard! Sort of like champagne dreams on a lesser budget? But then I think you know if I had all the money in the world what would I do with it?
You are having an off day but tomorrow is friday and you'll be beaming with sunshine. Hang in there, okay?
I thought your poem was great..
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Re: Battles Within
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by arden on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 11:59:29 AM AEST
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this is kinda sad. the rhymeing was awesome.
nicely done. i enjoyed it very much.
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Re: Battles Within
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by Stitch on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 12:34:51 PM AEST
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I'll have to post my "War" one of these days on the same subject. I know the feeling. You have described it perfectly and simply. Excellent.
Stitch |
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Re: Battles Within
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 11:47:02 PM AEST
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ohhh michelle, this is beautifully written and so touching!! every line is so powerful, im very moved:) huggies n' lotsa love, nessa
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