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Night is coming
Contributed by
purplestary
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Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 02:28:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You told me all I had to do was dream,
I did, but you lied again.
You told to believe in me,
I tried, but you brought me down.
You told me I could have it all,
Yet I’m left alone with nothing.
I need the night sky to come around
Because the sun, it hurts my eyes
I need a star to wish upon
To wipe away my tears
Soon enough the sun will set
And my time to shine will arise.
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Re: Night is coming
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 03:20:50 PM AEST
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| wow, i really like this. good write! |
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Re: Night is coming
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by loopylou on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 10:48:25 AM AEST
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| tuff, this is sad, but hey at least you can make *****ty experiances into a great poem! |
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Re: Night is coming
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 09:06:48 PM AEST
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| nice. |
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Re: Night is coming
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by nabokovfan87 on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 08:30:33 PM AEST
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| like most it could be better seems choppy not having a rhmy scheme or a flow try to read ur work to urself when u write it and make sure it will flow |
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