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His New Fangs
Contributed by
nail-to-the-head
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Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 11:31:31 AM in AEST
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A mist creeps over the dull, stone cobbles,
the moon hiding behind clouds, built with fear,
the only noise is the wind, howling down the street,
its His time, His time to feast, on pure clean blood,
His long black cloak, jolts around from the wind,
His tall hat, casts a dark shadow upon His face,
His eyes, dark and cold, can just be seen through the shadows,
but then a noise, someone's coming,
a frail young girl, in a long, red dress,
Her shoes, skimming across the cobbles,
Her skin, smooth and pale,
Her lipstick, as red as blood,
what luck, his found his prey,
He sits, and waits, for Her to turn the corner,
He grabs Her from behind and covers up Her mouth,
no need to scream, no one will hear Her now,
a cut along the collar bone,
blood slowly, trickling out,
His snake like tongue,
licks up the blood that falls upon Her breasts,
what a tender feast, for His new life,
one quick stab of a kinife through the heart,
and the young girl slowly dies,
He places her body down with care,
wipes the blood from around His mouth,
and smiles, to show His new fangs,
for this man, this creature, is a Vampire again,
He slowly walks down the old cobbled street,
back into the lonely light of the moon.
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Re: His New Fangs
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by loopylou on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 12:47:15 PM AEST
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| very descriptive this is intreasting i think you have to use metaphors to understand which is great a little thinking never hurts! |
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Re: His New Fangs
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by Sarafina on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 12:58:03 PM AEST
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| WOW! I can't say anything else. You blew me away. 'He' almost reminds me of a character in the book I'm writing. Keep it up. I'd love to see more. |
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Re: His New Fangs
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 01:06:10 PM AEST
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Dark, chilling and masterfully written.
I loved it!
Very well done
Larry |
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Re: His New Fangs
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 01:53:00 PM AEST
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| loved it...it was very intrigueing...very unique..i'm gonna read some more of your work... |
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Re: His New Fangs
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by Necromant on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 01:58:16 PM AEST
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Wow Awesome! I love Vampire Poems! Very dark and filled with vivid description! Wow! Awesome!
Anne :D |
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Re: His New Fangs
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 02:02:12 PM AEST
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| Awesome. |
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Re: His New Fangs
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by Juliet on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 02:47:22 PM AEST
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| Wow. Excellent poem. I love it. |
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