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On The Edge Of A Knife
Contributed by
intelectualPoet
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Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 09:41:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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On The Edge Of A KNife
One wrong step,
One Mistake,
Could cause my life,
To come tumbling down.
Each step,
Cause the blade to cut,
Deeper into my allready punctured flesh.
The pain becomes overwhelmed,
By my desire to return,
Back into the safety of your arms.
Tears flood my vision.
The crimson colors dance,
As my tears move about.
I blink,
Giving my a clear view,
Of the goal that lies ahead,
Just before,
Tears flood my vision once more.
I could go back,
To save myself from the pain.
But I'd rather live in pain with you,
Than live painlessly,
Alone.
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intelectualPoet
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Re: On The Edge Of A Knife
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 09:46:59 PM AEST
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sick, twisted, fark, dreary... and poetic. MAN you just gotta love the power of writing sometimes. you wield the pen pretty well, hopefully better than that knife! ;0)
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Re: On The Edge Of A Knife
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by morelikelyrics on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 10:35:13 PM AEST
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at first this was chilling to a certain point, and then somehow faded to a more inspirational form, and then to a beautiful finale...
could go back,
To save myself from the pain.
But I'd rather live in pain with you,
Than live painlessly,
Alone.
Well done!!
~Morelikelyrics |
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Re: On The Edge Of A Knife
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 12:54:13 AM AEST
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Oh..I just loved the positive ending... From the title and the beginning, I thought it was another one of those dark writes...but I'm glad I didn't overlook it....
Good write..
Jenni |
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Re: On The Edge Of A Knife
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by Archie on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 04:17:46 AM AEST
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| You did a good job. (fifth stanza, stanza second line -I believe you meant to say me, you actually said my) |
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