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God
Contributed by
parkman
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Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 03:37:35 PM in AEST
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I am black, I am white
I am day, I am night
I am up, I am down
I am sight, I am sound
I am king, I am queen
I am blue, I am green
I am grass, I am trees
I am the gale, I am the breeze
I am heat, I am cold
I am young, I am old
I am poor, I am rich
I am the path, I am the ditch
I am the pauper, I am the lord
I am everything, I am God
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Re: God
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by jan on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 04:01:03 PM AEST
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Re: God
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 02:15:49 PM AEST
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Yes, trepidous I was, clicking on this one. This is because I'm wary of the god-squad in religious poetry (not that i'm particularly averse to god per se) - Anyway - I ramble.
I loved the way you wrote this in opposition, in particular, juxtaposing blue with green. That fit perfectly after 'king and queen' (don't ask me why). I also like the fact that you don't seem to be as constricted as I in your rhyme. If I had attempted something similar, I would be forced to rhyme absolutely Everything, in hope that it fit and worked. But you did it anyway and it DID work. So true and so pleasurable to read.
Thanks for writing this one. |
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