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Eulogy
Contributed by
TheSchroedmeister
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Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 11:29:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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If only the wind could speak,
What tale would then unfold?
Would word be heard of passer-bys,
Of birth and desert gold?
If years that question find the ones
That answer would they know
That all that happens in this place
Stays in this place,
Lives in this place,
Is this place,
Forever more
Sure, I've seen coarser sands,
But here the finest grain,
In my temple where my wrongs are righted,
And glyphs say I am to blame.
Sun, save me from my doings,
Save me from my shame,
Save me from my sorrow, Sun,
Save me from my blame
The business of crafting burdens
From within myself
I know,
I try them on as desert robes,
And through these sands I go
But that was in the past,
The past so long ago,
And this a simple eulogy
To the pain I used to know,
For all the deserts I have travelled,
And all the dunes I've scaled,
This temple was my solace,
My pardon,
My tale
The wind can speak to me,
And I to it,
For who else to give the burden,
To relay my mournful cry...
Find me
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TheSchroedmeister
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Re: Eulogy
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 03:10:41 PM AEST
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A powerful write. You managed to capture the essence of the wind's intangibility (if that's a word), and wrapped it around an intense and captivating series of images. I could quote some lines, but I won't, as I'd probably end up quoting the entire thing, so I'll just say that you've impressed me once again with a sterling rhyme and write.
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Re: Eulogy
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 08:28:29 AM AEST
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This is a treasure. Intriguing from the first line to the last. Has anyone found you yet?
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Re: Eulogy
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by bernard on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 08:08:25 AM AEST
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I am sorry that I did not start reading your most excellent poems sooner. This is another masterpiece and yes if only we could understand the wind I am sure there would be no end of tales both tragic and of glory. The wind sees all, knows all but only the gifted few are able to interpret, You seem to be one of the gifted few.
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Re: Eulogy
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 04:54:05 PM AEST
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Not only was this poem GREAT, it was full of some of the most amazingly written lines, I have ever seen... "If only the wind could speak,
What tale would then unfold?"
And the repeating of lines, of words at the end of each stanza...mind boggling good. You have definitely portrayed these feelings. Great write. Again, I am crippled to you unique style and ability. for this, I throw in my pen.
Lindsey
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Re: Eulogy
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by Rikki on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 11:31:26 PM AEST
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This is the most beautiful write I have read on this site. Immaculate work!
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