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Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 07:52:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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idyllic meadows, dewy morns,
before Life's rose unsheathed her thorns
when stars above still looked so near--
old Never-Neverland called clear.
by day, by night, a child bright
was offered years of pure delight
in Paradise, sweet childhood,
where innocence stayed as it should.
old Neverland, in honeyed tones
cajoled, "stay pure! Don't seek unknowns--
if seekest thou to comprehend,
you'll lose your laughter in the end."
but answered she, "I wish to grow,
and know, and see-- my thanks, but no."
old Neverland bade fond goodbye
and murmured, "well, 'twas worth a try."
long years went by, and so she grew,
and so she saw, and so she knew,
as she'd been warned, her laughter left--
her heart in two, her soul bereft.
her pearly tears fell down, cliched,
to Never-Neverland she prayed,
"you offered once, but I said no
now say I, 'yes!'-- I wish to go."
she waited long, for so she yearned
for innocence to be returned
but nothing came, her world stayed bland--
she'd lost her chance at Neverland.
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ShadowDaughter
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by nail-to-the-head on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 08:00:37 PM AEST
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| i really enjoyed reading your poem. really made me think. :) |
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by Kie on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 08:57:22 PM AEST
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Dreams of neverland and a one way ticket.
*Sighs*
If only we could revisit when life seemed to drain us we would all remain childish at heart. That wouldn't be so bad!
A very unique poem..
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 02:35:25 PM AEST
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very beautiful Nora I enjoyed it.
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by arden on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 10:17:53 PM AEST
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oh nora this was beautiful beyond words. every line was pure bliss to read. i loved this. just so wonderfully written. you have alot of talent girl. keep it up.
Becky |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 06:21:15 PM AEST
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AHHH Nora! I'm so thrilled you posted this one...this one is absolutely dreamy. The last line does it all for me... "She'd lost her chance at Neverland" So many times we all do. Thank you so much for the beauty and the poise of this poem. It's sheer genuious and beautiful nature.
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 06:05:49 AM AEST
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As if the masterful rhythm, unparalleled rhymes and perfectly chosen words weren't enough, you've managed to capture deep, powerful emotions as well. Nora, you simply astound me with each and every write.
Truly, with CEGHs and aarkvarks :)
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by Suz on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 05:31:34 PM AEST
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| That is so beautiful... and sad. |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by poetrygodslove on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 10:20:31 PM AEST
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I stand and clap my hands my friend.
very beautiful write. l liked it very very much. sandy |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 12:53:05 PM AEST
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beautifully sad nora, hugs n' love nessa
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by afraid_of_fear on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 04:54:23 PM AEST
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wow.. this is just amazing.. an absolutely beautiful write..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by poetrygodslove on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 05:09:39 AM AEST
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a beautiful you let me see here.
but also in itself a sadness to my eye
when you said
she waited long, for so she yearned
for innocence to be returned
but nothing came, her world stayed bland.
good write my friend. wow.. sandy |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by poetrygodslove on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 05:11:51 AM AEST
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| each time i read it i see something else. .. thanks. |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by JennyFruFru on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 08:52:19 PM AEST
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| this is so sad... we all need our Neverland... inorder to keep us going on... |
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Re: Before Life's Rose Unsheathed Her Thorns
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 09:25:12 PM AEST
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| Your words are full of innocence. This is truly a sad write. *S* Cynthia |
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