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The Body In The Grass
Contributed by
night_child
on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 06:15:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The dew still fresh
Upon the green green grass
The yellow sun
So slowly rising
From its blackened bed
The birds happy in their singing
Celebrating spring arriving
The smell around
Of grass thats cut
By the machines of man
Look upon the merry scene
Notice the young body
Sprawled
Laying in the grass
The blood since then has stopped
Now dried upon the wound
Her summer dress is matted
In her very own blood
Pulled up slightly
Past the knee
Her hair flowing
Careless on the ground
Her skin is moist
From being there all night
The knife is gone
Thrown away into the river
To keep the secret silent
To keep the secret safe
Copyright ©
night_child
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2004-04-11 18:15:21]
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by Jackee_line on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 06:23:01 PM AEST
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| Well done , gave me the shivers. |
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by paper-heart-hero on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 07:16:27 PM AEST
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Thats a great piece. It starts so innocent and then swings 180 degrees and goes black.
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 07:22:46 PM AEST
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Chilling write..but so well written..
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by poet_of_anger on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 07:23:20 PM AEST
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| Wonderfully written, very twisted, at least to me, twisted in a good way, it kept me reading. |
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 07:28:49 PM AEST
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VEry wel done. The hair flowing careless on the ground is a lovely line. Chilling. Good work.
Stitch |
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 08:23:37 AM AEST
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This is one freaking yet gripping poem, you done an awesome job, it has a twist that draws people in, nice.
Keep up the awesome poetry. |
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Re: The Body In The Grass
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 04:44:51 AM AEST
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Very interesting... I like it.
Almost morbid, though.
Well written.
Take care.
David |
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