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Dead Life
Contributed by
deathdrop
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Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 03:39:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Dead, as i drop to the ground.
my blood has fled.
my skin has shed.
showing crimson light.
near by people stop and stare, in fright!
but i don't care, because for me,
it is a delight!
because now i'm dead,
it doesn't matter about what will happen in the future.
or when i was smacked around by a teacher.
And here i lay, on my own,
in my 'living dead' zone.
Copyright ©
deathdrop
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2004-04-11 15:39:21]
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Re: Dead Life
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by Queen_Dolly on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 03:52:13 PM AEST
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This is very good, your sister has a talent, and at 9 years old plenty of time to increase that talent =)
Hopefully we'll see Dot on here some day.
Tell her it's beautiful.
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Re: Dead Life
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by Thumper0719 on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 03:54:53 PM AEST
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| Hey, it really good! She should make an account. |
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Re: Dead Life
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 04:00:02 PM AEST
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Re: Dead Life (User Rating: 1)
by Happiness on Sunday, April 11 2004 @ 15:43:20 CDT
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Good news:
You can tell your sister that "Happiness" said she did a splendid job.
At the tender age of 9 she has truly shined with this wonderful write.
In my humble opinion, your little sister shows great promise.
Jarred.
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Re: Dead Life
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by kidpoet_213 on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 04:10:07 PM AEST
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Tell her it's great... she's got lots of potenial there...hope to see her on here one day soon...
~Donna~ |
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Re: Dead Life
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by AmaNdAsHepArD on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 05:35:30 PM AEST
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WOW!!i cant beleive a 9 year old wrote this tell your sister she is a great poet and should keep writing......lots of potenital cant wait to read more from her
**vamp** |
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Re: Dead Life
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 05:45:43 PM AEST
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| Woah! Tell 'er it's REALLY good! Uh, I'm a bit worried that she's feeling this stuff at age 9, but the poem's wonderful! |
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Re: Dead Life
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by emphaticplacebo on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 09:37:04 AM AEST
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| the beginnings of a great poet! a fantastic write. Pass on my best wishes for the future and tell her to continue with her talent! |
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