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Prayer to the Indifferent
Contributed by
spike
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Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 09:55:12 AM in AEST
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It’s just infatuation…
that make me look at you,
like some besotted love-sick fool,
when I know it isn’t so.
It’s just infatuation…
that keeps me playing games
like ‘Heart on the Sleeve’
and ‘Troubled Nights’,
when I know they end the same.
It’s just infatuation…
that puts me on a cross
a martyr to relationships,
imaginary or lost.
It’s just infatuation…
that leads me so askew,
and sacrifices lambs like me
to callous gods like you.
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 10:16:59 AM AEST
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Excellent write my friend...a clear cut case of sour grapes. If we cant have them they become unworthy of our efforts.
Very well done
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by Queen_Dolly on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 02:57:28 PM AEST
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| I love it.. your choice of words is beautiful, my favourite line is undoubtedly the last. |
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by morelikelyrics on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 10:34:21 PM AEST
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It’s just infatuation…..
That leads me so askew,
And sacrifices lambs like me to callous gods like you.
The last line made my jaw drop, and convinced me to go back and read this over, and over... each time realizing the deep emotions and excellence behind every word...
Great job!!!
...all the girls in every girly magazine can make me feel any less alone... |
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 02:52:43 AM AEST
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| I agree with the other comments, the last line is just stellar. Overall this was an intriguing write dripping with the hurt that comes from one-sided love affairs...well done. |
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by AnGeL_M on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 06:37:51 AM AEST
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Wonderful write Spike :-) I Loved It.... You Have A Terrific way With Words ....
Thanks For Your Comments On My Work For It Means Alot To Me....
********LoVe**AnGeL**********
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by Justalady on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 11:20:39 AM AEST
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| When there is nothing left but hurt and space the pen reaches out to try and justify. Great choice of words Spike. June |
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Re: Prayer to the Indifferent
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by PumpkinPie on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 09:47:41 PM AEST
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Yes indeed,
Beautiful poem to say the least...The last verse WAS very well said and I hope things are easier on you now.True how we tend to diminish the other as a way of coping,I guess maybe for the fact that it hurts knowing someone who we spend so much time and effort on couldn't care less...Ahh,human nature.....Excellent poetry.
PumpkinPie |
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