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Message in a Bottle
Contributed by
forever_lonely
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Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 09:14:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I drift along the tides of time
Can you see me, can you hear me
..Im here..
Calling, calling to you
Help me, please, please help me
Im lost, im so alone
So cold, so, so cold.. freezing
I need you, come, come save me
Save me please..
.. from myself
Im calling, cant you hear.. im falling
..Your not listening.. are you, as i drift by
Why, why, Why wont you listen, why?
Because your afraid.. of me..?
Afraid of the glass that encase my life..
..oh.. ok.. I see,
Then im nothing
Nothing, just.. nothing more
Than a message.. in a bottle
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forever_lonely
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2004-04-11 09:14:44]
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Re: Message in a Bottle
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 09:32:53 AM AEST
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I was just about to go to bed, but then I saw a post from you...so naturally, I have to stop and check it out. What a GREAT decision that turned out to be!
I'll pass on commenting on anything technical, since it is obvious to any who read it that you are as technically sound as they come. Instead, I will comment on two things: the boundless emotion strewn throughout the piece, and the extreme depth of the subject matter.
Dark, ambiguous, personal, deep, profound..all these things and many more. Luke, you have left me more impressed than ever.
Truly,
-V.S.
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Re: Message in a Bottle
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by silent on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 09:58:19 AM AEST
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Now that's a very very deep write. Amazing depth, and so very very well written. That put me in a wierd mood, well done.
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Re: Message in a Bottle
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 10:32:25 AM AEST
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I've been waiting for you to post. I knew it would be an emotional masterpiece and I was right. This is so forlorn...so filled with despair. You move the reader each and every time my friend.
Very well done
Larry |
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Re: Message in a Bottle
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 11:15:35 AM AEST
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absolutely held me spellbound from first to last, so sad, but cute too, maybe im weird but i think things like that are so magical, your message in a bottle has a powerful aura:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Message in a Bottle
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 11:46:37 AM AEST
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everybody else has said it for me!
well done.
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