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Questioning Existence
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 06:06:29 PM in AEST
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Questioning my existence
Since existence in itself
Does not exist
Can't feel my pulse
Coupled with these emotions
I haven't contended with in years
As I drown in this loneliness
Stuck in the womb of sin
I've prayed for deliverance,
But apparently its fallen on deaf ears
Unable to fight
Since my hands are tied
Head bowed before the jury
Sentenced for a crime
I didn't commit
Waking with tears in my eyes
So fragile, tormented by disturbing visions
Quaking with this heady fear
Can't find my pulse
As wet fingers scratch my wrist
I don't exist since I haven't felt
What its like to exist
(whatever that is)
Searched for love,
But apparently that doesn't exist either
And its left me only broken
Searching for scraps on the floor
My wings are clipped
And this 'existence' can be compared
With hell if that belief exists... anymore
Hope has fallen from my face
As I drown... surreptitously... silently
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 06:54:08 PM AEST
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this was an interesting poem to read joel.. sometimes a little confusing, but then aren't emotions always? yes it was enjoyable, and i liked the repetition of 'exists'.. good stuff..
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by a_bear on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 07:08:37 PM AEST
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| tears filled my eyes with this one, because I'm begging for forgiveness now myself and my pleas are bouncing off the walls and echoing back to me...going un heard..going into junk mail or a trash bin...and I can't let go. Wish I didn't have a heart because it's in shards right now and I feel every piece stabbing me... |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by Stitch on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 10:50:51 PM AEST
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Wow, some really incredible iimages and thougts here. Very iimpressive. I went through so much of this when I was searching. I can relate.
Stitch |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by jamsters on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 11:28:49 PM AEST
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this makes u think
i was silent drownding in thoughts after reading this
wow! |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 03:06:46 AM AEST
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| Amazing poem bobo. I could totally relate. |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by Chade on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 05:24:02 AM AEST
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| The poem puts delicate questions into a new light. I liek the way that you managed to convay fear with so tender words. |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by silent on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 09:18:50 PM AEST
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wow that was strong, "As wet fingers scratch my wrist", love that line.
You speak truth i think in the first three lines, very well summed up.
A very sad but terrific read,
Silent |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 06:58:46 AM AEST
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I found this poem to be intellectually stimulating and deep.
You sir are very talented.
Excellent poem.
Kie |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 10:53:44 AM AEST
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| um...does 'wow' count as a comment? no really this is brilliant, so many thoughts and pictures here, and also alot of truth. and to answer your question...i dont know if existence exists O_o confusing...great write. *hugs* phil xxx |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by CuttersAngel on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 06:36:54 PM AEST
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Joel, i think we need to talk soon.... when i chat with you i'll tell you my comments about this poem.... i leave you with only one though... there is always a purpose for something and someone.... its up to us to determine what that purpose is....
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by wyrd_faerie on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 03:56:28 PM AEST
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| joel...this has to be one of the most amazing poems i have ever read...the words, god...it's so soft and gentle but it hits so hard...i have tears in my eyes...oh... |
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 06:16:15 PM AEST
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Wow, thats all I can muster... That is one of the best I've ever read, joel. EVER! Great job!
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Re: Questioning Existence
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th April 2004 @ 07:47:33 PM AEST
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| This is an insightful, personal, and emotional poem--an incredible piece. |
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