|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Keepsake
Contributed by
ConfusedPancake
on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 03:55:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
|
loud glass shatters
jars of suppressed silence fill the gap
of a lonesome sound shivers
a fallen angel breaks his back
wounded and broken
seeing through the opaque windows
quietly outspoken
thinking so shallow
you open his keepsake for the memories
remind him of all that's lost
bloody tears bring the delivery
stinging sensation of a higher cause
the recollection of it all is too much
he breaks his wings and such
he lives to fall in a downward spiral
he cries to drown in his tears
he hopes to make it through the night
but he'll never last these years
Copyright ©
ConfusedPancake
... [
2004-04-07 15:55:24]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Keepsake
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jellybellyprincess on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 04:13:22 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Chilling was just the word I was thinking too..... the writing packed with emotion and depth. I love the "jars of suppressed silence" line. That I think is a perfect opening setting for the peice.
I loved this write-- really enjoyed reading it =)
God bless,
Ellen |
|
|
Re: Keepsake
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 04:17:42 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
a real spine tingler and food for thought, well done.
wildejohnny. |
|
|
Re: Keepsake
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 08:42:29 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I have felt this desolation before and it is a downward spiral. It takes a lot of inner strength to come out of it and start over again. This is a good write. I truly remembered the agony.
Rita |
|
|
Re: Keepsake
(User Rating: 1 )
by williamdye on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 10:59:08 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Awesome Poem! |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
