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Locked Within
Contributed by
MrWrite
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Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 09:26:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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This cold canyon which forms the groundwork of my heart
remains a barren wasteland, as it always has been.
Any attempt I make to bring back a spark of life
is met with failure almost instantly.
Friends, family, love....none of these things hold any significance to me. They're simply lights
which pulse and weave briefly
in the fabric of my being, before flickering out
as would a candle.
Many different emotions lay buried,
unable to be drawn out.
Even when standing in the bright sunshine,
I feel as though a pounding rain drowns my vision,
unmerciful, unrelenting, unmanageable.
These visions of my past drift into nothingness,
as they are replaced with an emptiness
in my soul that I fear
will never be filled.
The emotions which should be felt
bear no implication of who and what I should be,
as my childhood collapses around me,
innocence irretrievably lost.
The ashes of my youth have long since disappeared.
And these emotions that I still supress, shall continue to be feared.
Copyright ©
MrWrite
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2004-04-06 21:26:21]
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Re: Locked Within
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by thumper on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 10:28:46 PM AEST
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This write speaks to me of an immense emptiness, a void. I know the feeling or is it even a feeling? Emptiness? Drowning in unfeeling. If this is not the intent of this poem please let me know. Good write, very intense.
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Re: Locked Within
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by corrupted_minds on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 01:22:16 AM AEST
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| In your poem you said, "Friends, family, love....none of these things hold any significance to me." I always thought that friends and family were the one thing you kept close to you. And love the one thing you yearn to have. My opinion only. Good write, great emotions.. welldone |
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Re: Locked Within
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 06:01:05 PM AEST
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You have a great talent for expressing the dark emotions.
Very well done
Larry |
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Re: Locked Within
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 05:15:32 PM AEST
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This is very vivid and well-written. And a terrible sort of darkness it is. I hope you find Light.
Take care.
Andrew |
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