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Caught in distance
Contributed by
Soulless
on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:01:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Tempting words softly embrace her soul
Pouring like honey into her ear
Watering down the solid fear
Come with me Ill take you home
Back where you belong
Keep you from where harm may roam
Follow the radience of fantasies song
A new set of voices hold her back
Ominous spirits fly among her
Lost beneath the covers of black
And immobilized by fear so pure
Come with me I'll take your far away
Deeper into the darkened night
I'll bury you down near my grave
So you'll never be haunted by fright
Just follow the black petals I gave
In her heart she feels the voices call her
Looking up she sees shes all alone
Quiet awakenings cling to keep unsure
Mortified as all around they clearly droan
Hello it seems you've lost your way
Come with me I'll lead you far away
In the midst of all your fantasy
Along the bounds of only you and me
Radience drains away her fear
As she rises up to meet her end
Disappear among a stranger never there
Copyright ©
Soulless
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2004-04-06 18:01:30]
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Re: Caught in distance
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by LouisaMontagu on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:04:38 PM AEST
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<,Oh Wow, that was brilliant
A Very Well Done...
xcellent
Louisa x |
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Re: Caught in distance
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by ConfusedPancake on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:23:44 PM AEST
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| wow, that was amazing. very vague and yet extremely precise in conveying the subject's emotion. nicely done. |
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Re: Caught in distance
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:54:55 PM AEST
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| I thought it was well written, dark, mysterious with hints of dementia and/or hallucinations. Very interesting.... Kie |
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Re: Caught in distance
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 10:52:20 PM AEST
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| Great poem, rather mysterious and captivating. |
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Re: Caught in distance
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by corrupted_minds on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 05:37:07 AM AEST
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nice
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Re: Caught in distance
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by little_genna on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 12:41:12 PM AEST
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excellent, very deep and incredibly well conveyed to the subjects feeings yet not the whole story at the same time. well done!
love and hugs
XgenX |
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Re: Caught in distance
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 10:39:50 PM AEST
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Well I think this poem is about either a rape or a vampire has kidnapped someone. Something like that in any case this is the kind of poem I would love to unpack in school and I am sure it would scare all the mindless clones that taint my school. Anyway I think you should get published since it is a shame you are not. Once again a kick ass poem.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Caught in distance
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 06:41:40 PM AEST
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wow, so deeply enchanting, i love this poem all the way, your talent truely shines:) hugs n' love nessa
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