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GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
Contributed by
strange_lindsey
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Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 04:39:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Shining, gleaming, metal is cold
Streaking, smiling, growing so bold
This is the last thing you will write while you're here
Because greed is a single bullet that makes life disappear.
Hands start shivering, world starts quaking
The end is so close, there is no mistaking
The taste of silver in your mouth, quieting the rant
Because greed is a single bullet, it ends what you cant.
Violently ending, blood everywhere
It's okay though, no one will care
The mess will be cleaned, everyone on with their life
because greed is a single bullet, that ends all your strife.
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strange_lindsey
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2004-04-06 04:39:57]
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by silent on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:04:56 AM AEST
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Very dark poem Lindsey, i am glad you don't feel like this anymore. Enjoyable read though.
Silent |
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 07:58:05 AM AEST
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Stunningly aphotic, beautifully morbid. A feeling I know all too well, but could never sum up in verse. This one goes right into my heart, as it really hits home for me. Again, you amaze me.
And just for the record, this has to be among the best titles i've ever seen attached to a poem! So from the title itself, to the final line, this is awesome stuff.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by Necromant on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 09:06:42 AM AEST
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I'm glad to hear you're over that sad period of your existence. Wow the poem is really descriptive made me picture it! Very well written poem! You're very talented keep it up!
Anne :D |
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by JadedExistence on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 09:20:03 AM AEST
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This is just...exceptional! I've also felt this way many times but never been able to express it as wonderfully as you have.
~JadedExistence~ |
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by arden on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:35:30 PM AEST
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ohhh this was cool. so dark and chilling and full of emotion. just friggin awesome! impressive, loved it.
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:35:38 PM AEST
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Aiiiiiiii, stop it with the good titles! :-P
Like Anne said, glad you no longer feel this way (though it inspired great poetry!) . . . I lovedlovedloved the metaphor-ness here, nicely done.
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Re: GReeD is a SiNGLe BuLLeT
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by mountainhigh on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 01:27:18 AM AEST
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May all bullets be of paper, because the loss is felt round the world.
Beautiful poem, thank you for sharing. |
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