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Mourn
Contributed by
doriens_picture
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Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 04:07:58 AM in AEST
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Heaven screams out loud your name in mourning
I hold my screams in and let my eyes mourn for me
The heavens let the sky rain
The world falls apart and closes its self off in pain
Life stops carrying out its deeds
And death can't bear it's anymore
All the wants and all the needs
Can't fill this empty void
I want to close my self off from my feelings for you
I knew what I had and I miss it so much
But I'm left without options and with nothing to do
But it's the only way that I can touch
The very heart of everything that you did
So now everything ends
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Re: Mourn
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by ZooYork_Chick on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 05:47:11 AM AEST
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| wow this is amazing-only poem online i have liked. |
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Re: Mourn
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by Stitch on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 09:14:43 AM AEST
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I like this, but the last line is a little weak compared to the rest. I think that's because the rest is so strong. It's hard maybe to end it on the same note. Just a thought. The second line is my favorite.
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