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The soulless
Contributed by
Shadow
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Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 06:46:00 PM in AEST
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Crimson hands that hold such sin
The gentle soul that it wore thin
The world around that stares
Taking in there angered glares
Marching down the wooden hall
Trying your best not to fall
Do you remember her long blond hair
And her smile O so fair
Gone in time with my life
All brought down by a knife
Sins I know well and sins I bare
At my heart the begin to tare
I see her face and the silver knife
One stab and there was no more life
Sins I know and I know them well
My closest friends in my own personal hell
Copyright ©
Shadow
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2004-04-03 18:46:00]
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Re: The soulless
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by ShadowDaughter on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 06:48:58 PM AEST
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Whoa. Not going to say anything because, a) I don't know what TO say in response to this really amazing piece of work, and b) I think "whoa" is rather self-explanatory. Don'tcha think? :)
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Re: The soulless
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 06:58:54 PM AEST
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| A vivid and riveting write! though the meaning is somewhat a blur... I guess that's the gist but its feel really thrills. Hmm soulless... a sinner to boot..... I guess that's the spinner in the river of choices... when the soul we forget.. what dark deeds have been sown the seeds. Again very riveting write! |
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Re: The soulless
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 08:25:34 PM AEST
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You have every right to be proud. Very deep stuff.
Stitch |
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Re: The soulless
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by Soulless on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 08:26:58 PM AEST
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Wonderful rhyming technique you have. Thats not really what caught my eye though. It was first your title that captured my interest because of the similarity with my nick name. I enjoyed the wonderful word choice used and i think I followed well. I still think there is more hidden meaning I didnt catch...
Wonderful write
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: The soulless
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 12:40:12 AM AEST
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i liked this it was very good and very well said its always nice to see a poet who appreciates his or her work. Great job.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: The soulless
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by jaeann on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 03:52:35 AM AEST
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| ........sins i know well and sins i bear..........great write.......... |
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Re: The soulless
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by Necromant on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 01:28:27 PM AEST
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Gosh I'm impressed with this one! WoW!! Amazing write!! The imagery is impressive! Awesome write!!!!
Anne :D:D |
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Re: The soulless
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by Alli on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 11:50:16 AM AEST
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| Vivid and somewhat graphic, this piece stirs up a lot of feelings and emotions. Beautiful. |
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